All Comments on 'Ingrams & Assoc 3: American Life 01'

Good start

that's an obvious miss, also the latin on the tat could be put in web and translation found, and if insignia tat most are recorded

Enjoying your series. Suspense is building and mystery abounds. Good stuff. Looking forward to the rest of it.

If you make me wait for the other chapters of this story, I will find you and end you! LOL.

All jokes aside, I am intrigued beyond belief. Not sure why this story isn't scored any higher. One thing that I have learned is that you never trust the score on an author like Jezzaz. No matter what the number says, you will be sorry if you don't read it.

And now waiting to see if you have a strong enough line to pull a 5 from your readers.

How this story is remotely suitable for the Loving wives category?

In fact are ANY of the Ingrams associates April stories Loving wives ?

I'd say not remotely by any stretch of the imagination.

You have written some great stories in LW but these Ingrams ones are complete and utter rubbish by comparison.

Great start, ready for more!

However what does it have to do with marriage and loving wives.

....to those questioning why this story is categorized in the Loving Wives genre, I can only give my own opinion as a writer. First, the categories used by Literotica admins is rather obsolete as is the voting system.

It is just that Literotica only receives a limited income from their advertisers. How can they justify spending the sums it would take to reprogram the site. And even then program to what? Many of the eyeballs are cranky old white men, such as myself, and us curmudgeons HATE any change, even if it possibly would benefit our selves.

Second: that leads to the fact that the Loving Wives category generally is the most popular first search among readers. And certainly receives the most interesting volume of commentaries among all the story types.

I can not speak for Jezzaz's motivations posting his stories to LW. However, when I do so with my stories, I do so deliberately to provoke controversy and confrontation. Cause I am a sadistic bastard that way, who takes great relish inciting flame wars.

I like the characters. Nice intro to the new story.

This VERY MUCH a story about a man and his two wives.

But you need to read the rest to understand that.

Jezzaz, you had me intrigued by your remarkable story so far, but now we have two wives to look forward to as well? I hope we don't have to wait too long.

L

I only ever submit finished stories.

So interested in what follows, and how April gets justice for our dead hero. Really hope you can do it justice, as I have said many times, openings are pretty simple, lay out an interesting set of circumstances that leave the reader wanting more. You did that quite well.

I am so excited I will have something good to read the next several days.

Jezzaz, this is great. Just great. I know you have been working on this for a long while, and it's excellent. Thanks!!

Wonderful start.

Two quibbles ... Captains are not striving to make LT. Looies work for captains!

Other is more elaborate. Your editor may well have helped with sequencing, or organization or making sure nothing confusing or ambiguous was skipped over. BUT, there are a TON of crappy little misuses and typos in the story!

5*

I noticed that you got your ranks inverted. You must have been sleepy at the time!

The overall construction and plotting seems logically done base on the characters actions.

Congrats. This is an interesting beginning. Four out of five. While I love your other stories I have not been a big fan of the Ingram stories. But so far I am enjoying this one. No point in repeating the other criticisms about getting the captain and the lieutenant backwards. But I would just comment that sometimes your sentences seem to contradict each other. April is either tough and calm or shocky and rattled. Smooth and professional or babbling. It may be that she is changing from one to the other quickly, but I think that just needs to be tidied up a bit. I'm not nitpicking. I just care about your writing. Cheers Steve

for a good read and effort to entertain. Fuck you annony you pig

You set a good hook here . I'm loving it so far

Just finished the whole story and loved it. This will be going on my favorites list.

Great start (starting installment 2). Professional editing. Only found one error. Highly recommended.

Good start and so far so different from April's usual escapades. 5

Great hook!!! ⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️

Got a third of the way down the 2nd page and realized that this is not my type of story. Overall it might be a BTB but the story itself is not enjoyable. Psychologists who have sex with their clients? Sex with their coworkers? Including lesbian sex? HELL NO!! 1*

Excellent story! It was easy to go deep into it, especially the service connection, feelings of loss when it comes to my Brothers in Arms. I've always wanted to write about a friend of mine that came home from Vietnam, never went home after his discharge, afraid his Family hated him for what went on over there. Every where he went he had his Dobro and could play and put to shame even Jimmy Page, Stevie Vai and even Brian May. Hardly ever talked unless you fed him a couple beers. Took donations and got him a ride across the country to home in Connecticut. Never forget that last hand shake, hug and look before he turned and boarded the Greyhound Bus without a word being said. Never have heard from him or about him and that was over 40 years ago. I miss you Scotty and hope your still kickin'. Excellent story and worthy of 5 BIG ASS FUCKING HUGE FLAMING NOVA STARS!