All Comments on 'Pillar Ch. 01'

I guess from the dates that this and Ch. 02 are rewrites and that there may be more, especially as chapters 3,4 and 5 aren't visible. I'm enjoying this a lot. I value the care for her well-being that informs it throughout. To date it isn't exploitive, it is loving and respectful and it shows the promise of being very exciting. I quite like the gentle pace: not a quick sprint to the finish. I can imagine becoming a little impatient if this pace is to be permanent. Thank you. Oh, thank you, too for accurate spelling and grammar. Errors are such a distraction, sometimes terminally.

Most of the story hasn't changed, and the story's spelling and grammar were at a good standard before my rewrite, but I still felt it was needed. It was my first novel after all, and there were issues with my storycraft.

Most changes are in the pivotal third chapter and in the subsequent chapters 4 and 5. I'd recommend waiting for the rewrites to be posted. Otherwise you might be confused.

CaringAndDemanding

Impressive job!! Engaging story and good plot. Thoroughly enjoyed this story.

An absolutely perfect combination of caring and demanding. (See what I did there?) ;)