by Imstillfun
You simply can't craft a decent story, regardless of the category. UGH!
Sometimes, short and sweet is the way to tell a tale. As for the "bitchy" anonymous comment, it's of no real value, other than taking up space on a web page.
Your story was nice. It didn't have a lot of detail but the way you wrote it, a lot of detail wasn't necessary. As to people who put comments as Anonymous and can only bad mouth the efforts, they aren't worth worrying about. Most of those kind of people couldn't write a story if they tried to. I enjoyed your story and you didn't leave it open-ended which so many are on this site.
I enjoyed reading this story. I could feel the emotion as I read it. Don't worry about the negative comments, I get a lot of them on my own submissions. They just spur me on to keep writing. I'm looking forward to read more of your stories.
I have enjoyed your story. The women connected without being weighed down by a miss-founded need for permanence. They met they enjoyed and they parted acquaintances.
Every one of them is because this author is a cheating bitch. She gets Literotica to wipe out all the ones and twos she gets, and those are the majority of her scores. What you get is a stupid cheating writer, artificially inflating her scores so no one will know how pathetic she is. These story were all less than three until she started cheating. She reports that she is getting fraudulent scores, the moderators check and see all those ones and twos, think that they're fraudulent voters voting multiple times and they erase them. Since nearly everyone gives her stories ones and twos, the result is these ridiculously high scores. Just thought you should know that we're onto your game.
To the Anonymous person below me, you are a racist coward. Hints the reason you decided to post as anonymous. There was no need to resort to that. Yes, it's not right that she cheats, but still there was no reason for you to stoop that low.
I thought this story was pretty good, we all need comfort at some point in our lives and it should not matter who it is as long as it is agreed apon
I enjoyed it, not the best but pretty good. Shame about the person who is so rude and racist.
it needs more seduction, and could easily be open for more chapters.
Nice to see that other than one pathetic hater, those choosing anonymity can be kind, encouraging and focused on the literary merits and demerits.
A sweet story feelingly written, but not up to iamstillfun's usual standards. A good solid 4+.
From your delightfully dirty, or maybe salacious sounds better, gangbang stories, to this sensitive story of sensual caring and shared pleasure, your writing continues to be so very believable. Again, thank you
Thank you very much! This was a heartwarming story and a very nice spirit lifter. You do a very nice job laying out the character development with very words.
5 stars.
It's a lovely sweet stand alone short story that could be used as a platform to launch a longer tale.
I think more chapters would need more events happening rather than just more longer sex sessions between Janet and Cindy's nameless Mum.
Maybe tension between Janet and Cindy? Or Janet seduces Cindy? Or Janet seduces Cindy and reinvigorates the relationship between Cindy and her Nameless Mum? Or maybe Janet continues with Nameless One and Mark eventually finds out and there is lots of tension and drama until Janet goes to live with Nameless One, and maybe takes Cindy as well after her emancipation?
Lots of possibilities for the author to decide what to do with the story.
you have a nice flow to your stories, the way your introduce, build and strengthen your characters. Makes their interactions so much more real, believable, and it adds value to the following settings and or problems. I enjoyed this one a lot.
These stories are hilarious. The milf gets pumped and dumped by dudes. She is an emotional mess. She needs therapy to gain self-confidence. But in Lesbo world that is not the case. In Lesbo world women in emotional distress need a nice helping of fish tacos. This seems to solve every problem. It's the equivalent of men who think that strudel is the center of the universe.
Not a good story.
I love stories about creating new lesbians! I mean, they have the same desires as me, so why not.
sweet, and fun...convinced women a lot more fluid than men...
tho noticed, in both this story and Sister Moves in...never any mention of muffins, fingers go straight to clits...
I hope stories like these make men treat their women and wives better. Otherwise you will lose them.
Love and kindness can heal a broken heart, Janet was wonderfully kind and generous. Cindy just needed someone to push the right buttons. Well done.
I enjoyed the story. Don't really understand what all the negative nonsense is about. Certainly will read more of your work.