All Comments on 'Shaman Chronicles Ch. 03'

You have a really good lure for your fishing (reader's) like me. Please keep it up. lol

RJ Jones

Great chapter but could you please try and make the chapters longer, this is a great story and i hate reading a full chapter in 5 minuts. Please longer chapters

Loving the story so far but just a suggestion, find a editor with a better grasp of the English languages.

Hell yea thats wat im talking bout great story keep it up. Let the demon be a succubus they are sexy and hot demons

Hey! I just wanted to pop in for a quick word of encouragement, you really are writing very well, especially for a first attempt at a story. I'm liking the way the story plot is going, but have a few concerns/pointers, if I may be so bold.

1) It's a good idea to have at least a rough idea of the end plot of a story. This will likely change as you write it, but gives you a clear goal, and can help tie in a story. Else you run the risk of having the story 'run away' from you, and can back yourself into a corner.

2) There's no need to rush plot elements. You've done a great job introducing characters, however I feel like summoning a devil, even with help from a voice in your head on your first night in the academy is awfully daring. Keep in mind he's only 9, and if you plan on making him the protagonist in the future, and want him in any sort of sex scene, another 9 years will have to pass. Perhaps we'll see the story from another point of view as time passes? Anyway,

3) Personally, I find reading your work aloud helps get rid of some pesky typos, such as 'loose' and 'lose'. After you've finished a chapter, take the time to reread it aloud, then take a break, and sleep on it. If you can reread it in the morning aloud without finding anything, it's most likely at a good point to send to your editor, if you have one. That way the editor will be able to focus on word usage and sentence structure, as opposed to grammar and punctuation.

4) Keep up the good work! Writing and publishing something online for others to read, enjoy and critique takes a lot of courage. Please note that everything I write I intend to be constructive criticism, however you as the author have the right to write what you want. Overall, especially for a first attempt, you've done a fantastic job, and I can't wait to read your next chapter!

Hope this helps,

Cheers,

Dennis

Thanks for sharing and looking forward to your next chapter

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SHOULD BE

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I am enjoying your work. Thank you for posting it here.

but i love harry potter

Tight construction and entertaining. Keep up the good work Wordsmith.

This is a good story, no, its a great story.

However you desperately need a GOOD editor !