All Comments on 'Girls, Interrupted'

All I thought when i saw the title was the movie/book girl, interrupted xD

=) I just know there is a movie by that name but I haven't seen it. It's probably wrong, but I sometimes have fantasies about women in a psychiatric hospital getting it on late at night when everyone else is asleep...

Congratulations on a very fine first effort. If you pay attention to the technical details (by which I'm referring to a few typos and errors of punctuation and grammar), you have the capacity to join the top tier of writers. This site has plenty of verbal pornographers, but only a precious few write erotic literature.

You deserve an appreciative audience. That's why I gave you a 5, despite the nuts-and-bolts errors.

Thanks for your high praise and feedback! It's funny, I wrote the first bits of this story a couple years ago in just one or two intense evenings, for my own enjoyment, and I went back to it at least 5 or 6 times since, each time adding a paragraph here, a sentence there, until I was just tweaking phrases and words that didn't seem quite right after a few months away from the story, seeing it anew. Finally, the few mistakes that remained must have just sounded "right" in my head, so they became hard to see. But I felt it was pretty good, good enough to share. Even though I never intended to publish it, recently the random thoughts of "what if I got hit by a bus tomorrow?" made me think I should let it free, lest it wilt away forever in the secret folder of my "erotic thoughts and pictures" thumb drive. And voila, here it is! I'm glad you liked it enough to post a comment!

Bravo Vespa, a great first story - well written and very hot - I loved it!

Wonderful story. Will there be a chapter two?

Thanks for the compliments and the votes, literot and everyone! I'm really encouraged by the response. Will there be a part 2? Maybe... I've got notes started on Ashley meeting someone new while studying in the library... a place where I've drifted off into many a stray fantasy when I should have been concentrating. I'm going to try to write it so that it stands on its own, and calls back on these events in a self explanatory way... I would try something completely new but I can't get Jenn, Beth and Ashley out of my head!

More , more, there must be more... I loved it!

Loved masturbating to this! Made me cum sooo good!!

Thanks for the comments! And thanks to so many of you for favoriting my story. Since I've posted, I've found myself laying in bed at night awake, thinking about new story ideas...

that was hot, came all over my fingers reading this!

Sizzling hot!! More, please.

What a beautiful erotic story, so well written and so sensual.

Please write more about the girls, I loved every word in this story.

My two anonymous commenters, thanks! It gets me hot to know that I got you hot. Mmmm...

CassieK I appreciate your comment too. I've been looking at your favorites on your profile, I think you have great taste ;)

I also wonder if you taste great ;)

let there be a part 2. I went to uni in Australia where for most of us we went home at the end of the day so ... your story made me so jealous of girls in dorms (we call them ressies (residences) often here). I loved your tale I was so creamy

Always a pleasure to feel you cum. I think these girls are going to be close friends. I know nobody asked butt, our or my favorite is missionary cunalinquis, my hands under her bottom thumbs in her slit rubbing gently as possible, I've been scolded to take it easy. Ican help her lift up to my waiting face my thumbs probing top or bottom pleasure centers, tounge probing and wetting my nose yes my nose circling her clit, once I thought she broke it. Thats my reward for sticking my nose where it dosent or did it belong. Fealing her feet on my back or shoulders, gives us both options.

A wonderful experience for all.

Thank you Jennifer, Ashley, and Beth.

As a man one thing trumps all, looking into her beautiful green eyes widening as I push my impatient erection into her tight and ready pussy. Why do any of us even get out of bed. Love my ladies, butt glad I'm a man.

'*~*'

Hey Lamia, thanks! I dated a girl from Canada for a while and they called it Res, or Rez too. And instead of, for example, 9th grade, they call it Grade 9, in high school. Anyway, I don't want to start any gay panic, but living together with other girls when you are a lesbian has its advantages. It's not like we want to fuck every woman we meet but, mmm, it makes for some sexy situations, that is for sure.

I could have sworn I responded to your comment earlier! Anyway, thanks for your description. It's funny, I also think of Jenn, Beth, and Ashley as real people... gonna think up new adventures for them.

Don't you wish you could just join in!!! I sure do!

Thanks!!

My pussy is so creamy right now, after reading this story. I'm going to go cum all over my husband's dick while I think about these girls getting each other off every day.

I do wish I could join in. Maybe there is room for a story about a foursome...

Mmmm, I'm glad I could be a marital aid ;) Jealous to have that yummy girl cum go to waste on a cock but hey, why not?

Loved this story, but at first I thought it was going a bit too fast....certainly compared to most of the stories on this site. Then I realized that it reminded me of the fast pace of my undergraduate days in the dorms at university and had a good laugh....and wank !

Well done Vespa lady !

FR

There's just something about this story. Your writing is so authentic vespa! There might be thousands or millions of stories on this site, but there is only one like this one. It's so sexy and and passionate, and yet somehow still incredibly adorable. It's heartfelt but without having to explain why. Beth, Jenn, and Ashley are so genuine. I just want to snuggle them all up! I guess that's why I like it so much. I hope you'll write more stories someday because you have a special talent.

That was hot!!! That was great, please give us more!

Seriously, I like this, ok the subject matter is a little same old, but you write beautifully and the story flowed very well.

I see you haven't posted in a while, do you have more planned?

Yeah, I like it fast ;) But thanks for the feedback. I do like to get, well, pornographic pretty quickly, but still strive to warm you up first and give you enough backstory detail to place you into the head of whomever is doing whomever.

Oooh, I love your comment, thanks, that's so generous. I'm so glad you found it genuine and well, adorkably huggable. I've written another, it's pending, so when it comes out, please have a read!

Thanks! Some Like it Hot, indeed.

Hehehe, I know, college lesbo dorm party, yawn right? I dunno though, college was the period in my not-so-recent past that felt most sexually exciting to me, and honestly I miss it now that I've experienced the grind of working life. I did just write and submit (still pending) a more grown-up story, so hopefully you'll like that one too. I also really love sci-fi and fantasy, and read some stories here lately that opened up the erotic possibilities in both, so I hope to also develop a few drafts I already have in that vein.

Awesome story. Thank you for sharing it

Nice first time tale, although there were one or two things missing, I felt.

Like, for example, the awkwardness of doing something that was never openly, seriously discussed amongst your friends. Oh, we joked about the 'lezzers' spying on us in the locker room, accidentally rubbing against us in crowded corridors or trying to trick us into letting them touch us. Then when it actually happened, and I really wanted what was about to take place, I had absolutely no idea about what I could or should do! I wanted to touch, to lick, to kiss her in all those places I had only seen at a distance in changing rooms or from stolen glances at girlie mags. Was it acceptable? Was it polite? I didn't know and being a shy, slightly drunk first timer really couldn't ask the sister of a friend's friend who came up to me at a party and told me her gaydar insisted I was open to her invitation - she was hip and cool and beautiful, a college girl three years older than me, confident as all hell and just as intimidating.

I copied what she did in the end. She went down and ate me out, I went down on her. She sucked my titties, I mauled her breasts. She bent me over and tongue-fucked my virginal anus, I desprately tried to imitate her despite the feeling that this was disgusting - and yet I

found I loved it! It was certainly less disgusting than dealing with boys and their demands for messy blow jobs, and lasted longer.

I met up with her on three other occasions but it appeared she liked breaking in virgins and I outgrew her. And whenever I introduced a girl to the joys of lesbianism I always made sure that she felt comfortable with what was happening, where her boundaries lay, that she had a good time.

Lexi

Whoops! I missed some comments. I appreciate them so much I usually try to respond.

@Shampoofet: THANKS! And thank you for taking the time to comment on it! (see above)

@Anonymous (Lexi): Wow, that's a nice comment with a lot of hot personal details shoehorned in that I LOVE hearing about =) Thanks for sharing. Yes, when I was introduced to this side of me it was with more experienced women. I'd always had an innate attraction to girls, and my earliest sexual fantasies were about cunnilingus (actually, an brief but life-altering account of lesbian 69ing in my parents old dog-eared garage-sale vintage paperback copy of "Everything You Wanted to Know About Sex but Were Afraid to Ask"). But for various reasons around my upbringing and my religious situation, in my high school years I was pressured to "conform", or maybe I put a lot of that pressure on myself. I really did like a couple boys in high school and enjoyed fooling around with them enough to pass for years as a heterosexual girl. So yeah, when I was, um "awakened" in college there WAS a fair amount of awkwardness to it. I might explore that more in other stories, as everything happened a lot faster in this story and with a lot less hesitation than it did in real life, where there were many hints and teases over a longer period (months really) before anything physical happened. And I said, a LOT of awkwardness - I was so tongue-tied and put up so many unintentionally dead end responses because I'm not naturally quick on my feet. Anyway, when it came time for me to "awaken" others, I also felt a lot of responsibility - actually, back in college, an age difference of a year, or two, or three can be huge in terms of maturity, so for sure boundaries and sensitivity were so critical to success and avoidance of harm. On the other hand, it was important to have fun too. Hehe, I chuckle at your comment about "CopyCat" syndrome in my first few girl-girl experiences - totally brings back memories of what I did, and how unconfident I was through much of it.