All Comments on 'Steampunk Harlots Ch. 02'

Best way to get a pilot.

A unique setting and an interesting plot line leading up to the main event but the chapter seems unfinished. Don't rush your submissions, some authors take weeks to finalize theirs. The abrupt ending could be polished or extended where you introduced Hanna's pov. Let the story evolve and let it choose where each break in the chapters will be. Don't be afraid to write about things that may be uncomfortable, an anal scene with Hanna and the Champion due to his prefrences would have made a nice closer for this chapter.

-J

The ending couldn't have been different. He didnt want a woman regardless of what she would do to him. They instead had a quiet evening in good company to maintain his secret plus Hannah had already gotten her sex scene. (of course she will get a few in the next chapter) Im certainly not shy about writing anything, it just wasn't what I felt would be part of the story.

Gave me a chuckle with that last paragraph.

Loving the setting and seeing it develop. Nobles doing their thing, champion doing another. And a new lady had joined the crew, fun times ahead.