All Comments on 'A Serious Man Pt. 02'

Both these first two chapters are not yet one complete chapter. You are still in one scene.

What?

Who?

When?

Where?

Why?

Good start but one pagers are no fun. I'll give you a couple of weeks and come back. if I remember.........

This chapter needs either an ending, or a rewrite

You really framed your intro well, but where''s the story? The fact that the dept. knew to come in could have many answers: none of which you shared. BOTTOM LINE? A total waste of time.

Life took over and I lost my zeal for writing for some time. Combined with the fact that I lost much of the finished stories on a crashed computer....nevertheless, I am back and welcome the critical assistance.

I appreciate your reasons but why post another unfinished story and not another part of an ongoing story????????

Great start, I can see where you can explore many facets and make it as long or short as you want. I would look at about 4-5 three page sections to flesh it out.

***Needs a lot!!!