All Comments on 'Separated at Ten'

Im a fan of your Work since the first story but you always use the same story with different names and you don't listen to what fans want. Just try having a open eye on suggestions

Well, that story has been in the works for a while now. It finally got back to me. But worry not it be the last for awhile.

Maybe up to the beginning of the second page. Story had such potential. But I had to stop reading at about half way through page two. You can only push credibility so far with the type of plot this is.

Just not entertaining to read about a kid that gets beaten up in life, only to continue getting beaten by his saviours.

Sorry, couldn't continue reading.

it was interesting to say the least. wondering where it will lead to and what Robert's part in it will be...... Don't listen to haters they say crap because they can't write themselves....... and hide behind being anonymous like the cowards they are.

I've read a few of your stories, and I've noticed that they have two things in common.

1. You need someone to proofread/edit your writing.

2. All of your male protagonists are immature assholes, and completely unbelievable as anything remotely real.

The first is easy to fix, if you want to. I don't know about the second one. Seems that's just how you like your characters. Anyway, I didn't finish this story. #notmycupoftea.

It will be the last story for while what is that an ultimatum?

needs finished

No not an ultimatum happymuffin. I'm just working on other projects right now. So it might be awhile before a new story will appear.

The ending just feel really rushed. Feels like the story can continue more if you wanted to.

It was a excellent story. Thank you for it

We need to know the rest of this hot sexy story. Did they make a baby? What is the business they are in? Does Robert finally accept being head of the family? does he knock up his aunt too?

Please tell us more.

I will have to agree with ryan.. The ending does seem rushed. Otherwise it was okay just didn't like the parts his aunt was raping him :/

Every man wants a woman to feel about him like sister does for her brother. Only a very few lucky men ever experience such a pleasure. I enjoyed this tale very much.

There does, however, need to be more to this story. What is it about this family that makes them so powerful? Why does the aunt tolerate her niece seducing her brother so openly, and vice versa? There is much to be told!

This is an epic story. Please release a part two showing how Madeleine continues to seduce her brother guaranteeing a male heir to them while the Aunt is left with a daughter.... That would be justice for poor Robert.

This was good more please

This is probably the best story i have read on here please make a second part

Dude this needs multiple parts.

One doesn't simply end a great story there. It must go on.

Hope all is well with you. Pls continue this . A very entertaining story beyond the

plain or normal Literotica . So many possibilities

Yeah, I'm working on a part 2.

I hope there more of this story

we need the next chapter of this........pls

If " A Son Forced" is kinda outside my comfort zone, you can imagine were this one is. I think Robert needs to use "Combat Sex" against "Commando Aunt"as revenge. Sadly..., I think she would enjoy it.

Or, he's got a good start on subverting Anthony, and those two could bust out for an Arby's run. ( I love their roast beef.) The cuff-links are the key.

What I;m trying to say is I need to read the next part!

Another chapter would be nice for your readers

Working on it.

Noway this ends here surely....

More than one actually. So his father turns out to be a crime Lord but they live in a small suburban house and no one comes to claim them after his death except for one and who's not involved in the family business

This is a family who based on the aunts actions has no problem with intimidation, violence, kidnapping, rape, and I'm betting murder since there a crime family at least that's what you're hinting at but when it comes to finding the lost family leader they only do everything legal to find him

How does it make any sense that are crime family willing to commit violence against their own but are unwilling to step outside the law to rescue a 10 year old child from the Foster system

You need a serious rewrite to make these holes disappear make his stay in the Foster system part of the conspiracy orchestrated by screwed over former judge or something that is Father disgraced or blackmailed or something there needs to be a logical reason why people willing to kill couldn't find someone other than " well we decided to follow the law just this once for no apparent reason whatsoever"

And don't make him such a b**** that he rolls over 6 hours within the time he meets his aunt and get smacked around by her have him eat the f****** eggs and slam is EpiPen into the table and snap it off so it can't be used to save him only to have his aunt state I know you were allergic to eggs they're imitation eggs

Seriously need a whole series of these to read. Brilliants idea, look forward to more

Loved the story when can we get the next few chapters

I hope there's more to come

great story I can't wait for the second chapter

Hey are you ever going to follow up with new chapters this is good so far, good story just needs more chapters left cause you left many questions.

You seriously need to finish this story and maybe actually describe the characters better. I really enjoyed this story but it needed more details.

Story needs more of an ending8

I'm simply riveted by this please think about continuing this story you have a wonderful story here just needs to be finished and as always thank you for your hard work

I would love to see more of this tale!

Would like to see more chapters it was very good beginning to a story

I keep coming back to your stories, hope you can find the time to continue this story with all the others your writing.

I found this to be disturbing this man who has been beat down his entire life essentially got kidnapped by his family the raped and beat up into submission and continued to get abused by the people who are essentially portrayed to be the good guys in this story guess it's not my cup of tea as im not into femdom in the first place but i also feel as of reading the first 3 pages it has a bad message

She was saved from a crazy aunt by another crazy aunt? He was raped and beaten by his aunt, then his sister [who is supposed to love him] tied him up to rape him again. the writing was great but the premise was weird. unless you are planning to turn it around and have him take charge, and give his aunt to anthony and the boys while taking his sister for himself. will there be a chapter 2?

Needs a sequel!

I like a lot of your work, but this isn't on par with most of it. It's an interesting storyline, but it ended without a finished plot. Feels like the story may have got away from you, so you just ended it. Might want to revisit this at some point and either redo it or add another chapter to properly bring it to a conclusion. Your the Author so if you disagree with me, that's your choice. I think this has potential, if given a chance.

sequel please

for real this really needs a part 2 and maybe 3 surprised it doesn't have one

Jesus Christ, love soul71's work, but damn, why do these authors write a character like Robert, whose been through a lot, abandoned by his family who he did not see in 10 years all of sudden show up, he grew up alone needing no one, then 10 years later at the drop of a hat, he goes to stay with him, he didn't even put up a fight. All those years he spent in the orphanages practically fighting for survival only depending on himself, he just gives in. Yeah, it's for story purposes or else there would be no plot, but come on, he could at least put up some sort of fight instead of just going "okay, even though you abandoned me years ago and I hate you for that, I'll erase all that and go with you because you are my family and I love you." Come on Soul71 you could've done a better job than that. There are some of your stories that you could've done better on the protagonist parts, like just giving in so quickly to whomever that they are against.

I understand you don't like anonymous replies. So, I hope you would read this before discarding. I've read most of your stories and find most very thought provoking, and well written. Broken chapter 01 was my first story, and like other writers you have written, I'm waiting on the future chapters. So many still unfinished; however, if time is required to write good chapters, please carry on. This story is deemed finished; however, I think you can carry this one further on Robert's thoughts of the family busines and his efforts in taking control from his aunt; maybe, destroying those who were responsible for his parent's death, if they are still around. I'm generally please with all your stories. This one, I feel isn't complete.

Some additions would only serve to make this story better.

5/5

Wonderful story that needs a sequel. Well Done 5 stars

There needs to be more of this. As usual a great story.

Too many huge holes to save this story. No way to explain one kid gets a Cinderella story and the other kid, the heir apparent, is abandoned by the same family that saved the daughter. Focus your talents elsewhere.

Just found this story, it needs more to it. Please write more

Ignore muskyboy. This is the intrrnet, there are trolls and flamers everywhere.

Nice story.

I’d ask wtf I just read but I’m just gonna try and forget

You need to add more to this story. You have a good start but it needs to be continued.

This story has so much potential... Yet is disappointing in no explanation as to why/how the Aunt could physically overwelm him. In so far as the storyline went ? He is just a little wimp.

Another excellent story with a lot of different threads. There are a lot of unanswered questions. Who burned their house down and killed their parents? What does his aunt really want with him - head of family? Why do they need him now, what has happened that has made it urgent? Is he going to remain or is he just stalling for time to find out how to leave? He doesn't trust them how can they gain his trust if they need him to do something for them? These are just a few of the areas not forgetting the other aunt and why she did what she did to separate the 2 children - what was her reasoning - was it a way of protecting them/him/her?

A 5* story that begs for more.

I feel like this isn't finished and you just threw a "the end" at the end to say it's finished. He doesn't explain why he hates them when it was his aunts fault, just ends with him being raped by his sister at the end, doesn't exactly say what the family business is other than owning clubs and apartments, seems like the aunt wants a dom partner while she is also a dom, and last but not least if they are in the criminal business it would not have been that hard to find him by paying off people.

Interesting tale, but the ending is missing. I hope there will be sequels.

The story needs more.

Once again, an excellent story but it is crying out for some kind of finish. There are still several questions unanswered, what is his reaction to his sister after this night good/bad, will he feel it is a betrayal or as a way to be accepted. Does he become the head of the family and how is this achieved? If he has a poor reaction, does he try to get away and what would be the result? If he stays, how does he handle both his aunt and sister? Why was he left behind and his sister taken to the family home? I hope you can find time to produce an ending to this story.

awesome start. unfinished.

I'm sorry Soul71 I really don't like stories that involve rape there is Never a need for raping someone either male or female and ALL the sex in this story involved the MC getting raped. Please sir if you would as I'm a huge fan of your writing, Please tone down in this trend.

Yes would love to read more of this story and see how things go.

more please

I'm with BigMike9in on what he wrote a couple of months ago. No more rape. This went beyond some of the forcefulness / dom or domme play you had in other stories.

Do think the story has potential, but the jump from going from 'missing brother / nephew' to 'let's make babies to secure an heir' felt too quick. It's giving me vibes that Robbie is toast as soon as either the aunt or the sister is pregnant with a boy child.

This story needs to be completed. I would love to see more chapters as to where he takes over the family and gets revenge for his parent's death. 5 stars as always.

Personal opinion but I felt like he gave in too quickly, bit of a trend I’ve noticed with most of your stories with the males, just my opinion though.

Soul has some really really amazing stories. This isn’t one of them.

This story needs more...it is just missing something to it.

Overall a good beginning, but without a couple more chapters, it is a little mundane. Please, finish what you have begun... Thanks.

So, sister rapes him, just like the aunt did. More chapters needed to potentially get his revenge on them and the rival family that killed his parents. But, Soul has a bad habit (IMO) of having the males submit too soon

Another good start to a story that just ends when it all has a lot left to go. Sis winds up raping him too when he should be the one going to her, and what about the so called business, ppl who killed his father, and the unsettled relationship with his aunt? Seemed he and Anthony were starting to click too. What about the guy in the club? Way too many threads left untied.

What kind of fucked up family is that it was clear he didn't want that so basically they raped him which is a turn off and you hyped him up at the start just to show he is a fucking coward/ a cuck bitch so why call him a man cause he's not cowards and cuck bitches is not and can never be a man

Always. A great read

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I hope you continue with this one, it is well placed for a multi part. Excellent read.