All Comments on 'Jake's Place Pt. 01'

This is taboo note STUPID

No idea what that means.

Did not know grade schoolers were on this site . Needed to be a little longer with interaction between main characters

I think, not sure, but I think the first reader was trying to say this was not taboo. Hey, she fucked her cousin. Now contrary to popular opinion, that is legal in most states. But it still is incest. So not sure what he wanted. Bro-sis, dad-daughter, mom-son? Who knows? But it most certainly was taboo. I will agree with the other reader to an extent. You need to work on the story. I think you had a great idea and it was well written, but one page won't cut it. You need to flesh it out more and give us a sense of where the story is going. Surprises are great, but it needs a purpose. I try to be constructive though and just bitch like some others. So keep these things in mind and keep trying. Good luck.

Finish this will you.

I’m Looking forward to later chapters.

The writer better get up to date. They've been "nudist resorts" for at least 25 years.

Read it twice in a row, and I'm still not sure what's going on or what the story is about. It's abit all over the place. Maybe it me, maybe not. Thanks for the effort.

Like a jigsaw puzzle with a couple of pieces missing . . .

Non story set in Seaside FL, the redneck riviera . . . .