All Comments on 'Bring Me to Life'

For your first story you did a fantastic job! I loved how you built the story up and let us understand the characters of the story. I thought it was definitely a 5 ⭐️🌟⭐️🌟⭐️ Story. You definitely need to continue writing ✍️.

I can only echo Thumpers words..

I loved the banter between the characters. The slow build-up was just perfect! Five stars! You definitely have a gift. Please write more.

I was so excited when I read your foreword! Not only was I about to read my favourite kind of story (slow building romance), but careythomas had a hand in editing!! Your story certainly delivered! I loved it. Can’t wait for your next effort and hope I don’t have to wait too long!! Much love and many thanks.

I love this story. I love buildups. I love romance. I love friendship. This story had it all and then some.

Ordinarily, I do not like stories with a long build up, but this was so masterfully and lovingly done, that it was well worth the wait. You are an excellent storyteller, and this was perhaps the best first effort I have read on this site. Congratulations, and keep up the good work.

Well done (and thanks for the shout out)!

Just excellent, especially for your first submission. 5 stars all the way. I look forward to watching you grow as a writer.

This story and characters were brilliantly drawn.......the right combination of compelling story and erotic interludes. If this is your first effort, I can't wait to see what your future offerings will be. And there MUST be future offerings from you!!!

This was powerfully written, and wonderfully executed. I will be looking for any future work from you

For your first story I would say it will be hard to top this, even though it took me all day to read, it grabbed me from the start and I usually do not read story's past 3 pages, this was very good, and I look forward to more of your stories

This may be your first story on this site but I think you've done a great deal of writing previously---either that or you are incredibly gifted. Over the years I've had a number of friends who are pro and semi-pro writers and editors and I have never seen such a fine first effort before. The story had everything, including the strong, slow burn which I for one thoroughly approve of. For personal reasons the heart-wrenching scenes regarding Lexie's bereavement really gripped me by the throat and shook me. Congratulations, Andaryll, on a superb piece of work.

This big, strong cowboy had tears in his eyes by the end. What a fantastic story.

A wonderfully written story! Thank you so much for sharing it with us!

Your feedback means a lot to me, and to have had such a profound impact on so many of you... I cannot express how grateful I am to you all. For those who have asked, rest assured I don't intend this to be a one shot. I'm already working on a second chapter for Bring Me to Life, and later have some other ideas I want to explore in writing.

I used to do a lot of creative writing in college, so not entirely new to writing, however as that was 10 to 15 years ago I was concerned I might be rusty. Full credit to my editor for helping polish out the rust before I shared my first installment with you ;)

This was a fantastic story and I am definitely looking forward to reading whatever you share with us in the future! I love a slow build...getting to know the characters enhances every aspect of a story...especially a love story. Thank you!

What a beautifully written tale. The best ever I have read on the site. Also brought me to tears as so redolent of my own current situation. Looking forward to the follow up. Don't leave it too long!

This is definitely one of the best stories I have ever read on this site. I'm excited to see what you do next.

I think it's all been said by everyone else already - suffice to say I loved it and am eagerly awaiting the next instalment!

Well done you! 🌟😸🌟😸

You talent for storytelling shines brightly in this piece. You should definitely post more of your work for all to enjoy. A heady mix of sadness, discovery, acceptance, love and passion gave this piece a poignancy not always found in erotica. Kudos to you.

Ps: for some inexplicable reason, my tablet only allowed me to give your story one star. I'd give it 10 if I was able.

This is definitely one of the best stories I have ever read on this site. I'm excited to see what you do next. please i did enjoy it

i liked the story a lot. but i feel it ended a bit abruptly for all the build up. an epilogue or a second part i think would make it that much more satisfying.

Wow! excellent story, I look forward to reading more of your work! Thank you for sharing this with us.

Thank you for this impressive first work. I did doubt you at one stage. I was really enjoying the story but started to worry about Max being left in the condo for a couple of days. I wondered if you had forgotten him then you mentioned about the neigbour looking in on him. Well done and sorry for having any doubts. Please keep writing as you have talent. 5 well deserved stars.

This story is a good read. I enjoyed it all throughout. I just wish there were longer build ups and character development. But overall, it's awesome. I'd love to hear more of your stories sweetie.

As much as I love raunchy lesbian sex, I much prefer a good romantic story. This was a great romantic story.

Thank you!

Very enjoyable, I really hope there is more like this from you.

Such a great story! I also prefer character building and you did this wonderfully. Your style of writing as well as where you chose to lead your characters.. I thought it was brilliant. Can't believe it's your first story.. you have a natural writing style! Super easy to read, great pace and loved the story line. :) All the best on your future works!

One of if not the best lesbian story I have ever read on this site. Your ability to draw the reader I. And paint a picture is incredible. You made me smile, you made me laugh, and you also brought tears to my eyes. I wanted them to become lovers long before they actually did. I was the cheerleader from the sidelines.I would love to see another chapter to this beautiful romance.I can picture Lexie moving back into her house, and the feelings it conjures up. What happens as the lovers go back to the office. The possibilities are endless.

More than a few tears were produced. Thank you for such a beautiful story; the sex just added a little excitement.

I absolutely love this story. And I produced more than just a few tears, like a waterfall they kept flowing.

This is a great story... emotion of all kinds, written with real feeling.

Hope u write more.....lots more. Dont rush it tho, please or ull ruin the feel.

A few more chapters. Cant wait.

Al.

Hi everyone, just wanted to post an update. I finished the first draft on the second chapter, and once I'm done editing I will be posting it. Thank you again for your wonderful comments.

I have just finished reading this for the second time--the first being over two months ago. This is truly a beautiful story--of people, of life, of love. Character development is exquisite, making the reader feel as if they know these people personally, and is better for it. Even the minor characters are so human! Wonderfully real!

what a touching , beautiful and very moving story. and yes i stayed up way to late reading this with a lot of tears . thank you so much for posting this awesome story here. you have a huge fan here . best wishes sarah

Second time reading this wonderful piece. I love a good love story and this is definitely up there as one of the best. Can't wait for chapter two.

I look forward to reading more of your work!!

This is the third or fourth time I've read this story, and it just keeps getting better. There are only a handful of stories on this site that can bring me to tears, and this is one of them. Thank you for sharing it with us, and please continue writing, you have a gift!

I loved this from beginning to end. The character build up and the sensual tension build up as well... For the sake of propriety I will not mention her how it has affected me as I read this. Great and look forward to continued reading !

Why does a bi-male read lesbian erotica? Simple...because of writers like you. My guilty pleasure is romance stories, and some of the best are posted here. There are many male writers on literotica and many are very good...but...to my mind the best are posted here. I thank you for your effort and praise you for your talent.

Hooked and enjoying your writing. Looking foreward to the balance of this love story.

You are a favorite...

So amazingly written and beautiful. I love it!

What a fantastic story. A perfect balance of tragedy, longing, and love. The Princess Bride bit was just the icing on the cake.

This was a beautiful tale of loss, healing, and love. I absolutely loved it.

Such a fantastic story! Your writing covers everything i look for in a great story, though the characters and the real and raw emotions you infuse them with, are what really makes your work so wonderful. Have read this several times and i'm crying every time. PLEASE keep writing stories like this and sharing your gift. You and your work are truly special.🌹🌹🌹🌹🌹

I almost cried a few times. I really wanted them to fall in love too. Wonderful characters. Thank you very much.

Absolutely beautiful story in every way! I love these stories that have a slow build, developed characters and a great story line. Well done!!!

This is the second time I’ve read your stories and they are incredible !!!

But, when are you going to bless us with more....

I know every circumstance is different, but the fact that Lexie only seemed to have the one "conversational" dream with her deceased partner really hit a chord with me.

The first real love of my life passed almost 30 years ago just before her 25th birthday.

I was hurting but as Lexie pointed out, I was beyond angry as well.

A good few months after her death, I had a conversation in a dream, only ever the once, and when I woke I genuinely felt it was time to move forward.

Your description was 100% spot on, at least to me.

A very well written story well deserving of a 5 star rating.

My third time reading this and still just as wonderful as the first two times. Beautiful.

Make it a 10. I really enjoyed your story.

It's a really good story but I think taking time to build up and develop the realtionship more would have added more realism to the proclamations of the "I love you's." 10 years Lexie had been with her wife who passed away 1 year ago. 2 months of working with a new assistant and they're succumbing to the lesbian joke of sex and the u-haul. This story is worthy of more respect more reverence. Perhaps I'm being too knit-picky, cause after all, that's why it's called fiction. Nonetheless, it is still a darn good read.

I really enjoyed this. You drew the characters well and had a nice slow build to it. Not a lot of sex, but that didn't bother me at all.

Wow !! Thank you .. that was amazing ...

Wow amazing writing!! Love it so much

I want even more of Mikey and Lexie. I want them to have their lives together filled with love and with doggy Max.

A great story…where are the tissues…???

Thank you for sharing,

Such a sweet story. So well written, an absolute pleasure to read.

I really enjoyed reading about Alexis and Michaela...the whole loss of Sam back-story...the meeting and developing work relationship that turned into more.

The dream with Sam, giving her blessing to keep on living...I think that happens quite often, in some form or fashion, for those who lose a loved one, especially one who has been the "love of their life"!!

Chapter 2 is waiting; hopefully it is another 5-star story like this one!

Excellent story and writing.