All Comments on 'Scales Ch. 01'

I wrote out the first two chapters at the same time, and now that this one is up, the second one has been submitted. I'll try and get new ones up as quick as I can, but I can't guarantee a time-frame. Check back in a few days for the second part!

I strongly suggest that you enlist an editor to go over your work because you don’t use pass/present/future tense correctly. I couldn’t even make it through to where she met the client. It’s a nice story but your constant misuse of correct forms of tense, completely turned me off from your story. Good luck!

Normally I don't have that problem. I tend to bounce around in how I write from multiple angles of view, and it usually translates well. It's weird, and rough, but it's just how I write.

Maybe you could explain about the 'orgy' that keeps getting mentioned as well as who's Jim

Clark84 I mentioned in the first opening paragraph that this was a side story from my other main story Carrots. If you want to know more about the things I mentioned in the story, I suggest reading Carrots first.