by geronimo_appleby
Nothin' like takin' on two guys, includin' one ol' fart, on a movin' train no doubt. Your words made me feel like I was gettin' eaten and fucked. Thank ya, chile!
I like the idea of sex on a train with 2 guys, but the characters you've chosen didn't do your base idea justice. 2 old ugly (1 married) guys isn't fantasy for many women dare i say, likewise, you described a very pretty, sexy, young woman -- then made her entire personality into 'i only want to dress up so old men perv on me' which makes me think you're very out of touch with women - aka a large section of the audience on this site