by SolarRay
I really enjoyed reading this story, it evoked a lot of feelings of the loneliness and angst of the single life. Also the joys of discovery with a new lover. My five stars are in. Good luck in the contest.
You and I have such similar sense of humors!!
Your story has ALL the thoughts, emotions, curiosity, frustrations and expectations that are so often in my mind. It was so easy to slip into her mind and almost feel the thrills so skillfully expressed in your writing. Ta, mate.
Incredible story. Extremely descriptive. Major league woody here. I'd love to see how this relationship proceeds. Well done. 5 stars
DragonRider55
Thank you everyone! I am extremely grateful for your comments, and very happy that this character has struck a chord for you. I definitely hope to offer more like this in the future. Thanks for taking the time to read and share your thoughts!
Very readable, very believable. Just enough with getting graphic.
I like the realistic way you described your breasts. I know what you mean without being grossly descriptive.
Great story. Sex is and should be fun and playful.
‘I cannot overstate just HOW much better it feels to have your pussy eaten by a cute guy, rather than a precocious stuffed bear’. Best contextual, authentic, joyful sentence I’ve read on Litorotica in years. Well done.
Happy April Fool’s Day.
This was a fun, imaginative story paced just right. I loved the teasing buildup and the glimpse into her head through the diary entries. Really enjoyed it - 5 stars!
I freaking love everything about this. The best read, and it is now a new fantasy of mine. Thank you for writing this. It is an instant favorite!
Two wonderful characters in an original and sexy situation. I loved the delicious anticipation and the sudden spilling over of her voyeurism into sex. Bravo!
Mmm I enjoyed this story very much. I love watching and being watched. It's a real turn on.
You're a great writer. You make the feelings of your characters come alive, not just lust, but frustration, guilt, embarrassment, hopefulness, and wonder. Your stories are a pleasure to read. Thanks.
You created great, convincing characters, and the story is really hot. Great job!
but being forgiven is so much better. I'm sure there's more to this story than has been told, and I expect their little sexual play will blaze into a full-blown adventure (pun intended).
Worthy of more than five stars. Oh, and by the way, good luck on the Clitoride awards.
A change.
A woman taking charge of her desire, I think David s approval was her final release
Lovely premise.
But lacks details and dialog during sex.
They watched each other masturbate. Okay. But why no dialog during it? Why no questions from either about what the other was imagining while masturbating?
Why no directions/requests telling the each other what to do? Faster? Slower? Harder? Softer? Don't play with your clit? Touch your clit? How does it feel? Are you getting ready to cum? How do your balls feel? Why don't you play with them?
She told him what she wanted him to do to/with her. Fine. But needed to hear the words as she spoke them.
And you need an editor/proofreader. You wrote: "I heard the soft creek of his door opening..." You meant CREAK, not CREEK.
Four stars with real potential.