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by WillieTurner03/07/18

Great first submission!

I'd like to see more in the story about how the woman feels as she takes control of her man. The emotions, the lusts, the fears, and the pleasures, she might have. I'd like to see it for the man as well, though I know getting a strong empathetic character of the opposite sex is hard to do. It is for me, at least! I am just now feeling comfortable with writing from the woman's perspective, and I'm still not certain if my female characters are believable to other women!

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by Eltee8403/09/18

Brilliant

A brilliant story; very well written. So passionate and explicit with great dramatization. More power to Your pen!

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by SimonO03/13/18

Well done!

Really well written. Of course, it would be great to explore these characters a bit more. Congrats Kiki. :)

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