All Comments on 'The Cop's Offer'

Bit of an abrupt ending but otherwise well written and enjoyable to read

Things were moving in an interesting manner until the last three paragraphs where everything just aborted. Maybe in another chapter she can wake up, say the last couple paragraphs were a drug induced dream and explain what happened?

I'm still pretty new at writing, but I was hoping to leave this open ended so people could fill in the blanks about what happened next. You piss off a crooked cop like that, and then find yourself 100% at his mercy, and some pretty non-consensual things can happen.

Literotica has this odd rule that NonConsent stories need to have an element of the victim enjoying their plight and that's just not realistic. I think of thought by keeping things open ended I could side step that issue.

I'll do a rewrite of this event and post it in a few weeks with much less ambiguity. We'll see if the editors of the site will let me post it.

(And if they don't I understand. It's their site.)

I can deal with a little ambiguity, but quite frankly I think it's pretty obvious what happened to you in that hospital bed! Glad you got out of Iowa! (Not that it's necessarily any better anywhere else.) --JB

Try developing your stories a little more. Most readers don't want a short story or an essay. Your stories start strong then fizzle out and die.