by astridgray
More, more!!! It would be so good to read the continuation of this story on a more expanded level. Flashbacks to past feelings of longing. Also where do they go from here? Really enjoyed it and hope you’ll write more. I love a slow burning love story!! Much love and many thanks.
It is well written but you need to take a bit of time so that the reader can get to know the main characters. Look forward to your further work
This was over almost before it started! Yet that is a good thing. It was a 'wham bam, thank you both mams' story. I see demands for more, but for me, less is more. Leave it where it is otherwise it will reach into cliche: girl marries wrong person (man), lots of angst along the way, finally girl marries girl usually after running away together Graduate style.
Might as well have a cookie cutter. Girl marries douchebag and immediately realizes that its her best friend she really loves. This theme is burned out and depleted. I know. I am sure to get the write your own stories. To that I respond be original.