All Comments on 'Captain Of Her Heart Ch. 18'

Wonderfully paced, great storyline, and great sex. I just wish I could meet them and have them as friends.

hot_robin

I loved everything about your whole story. It had the perfect mixture of romance, hurt, and of course sex. Very enjoyable :).

Diana

Girlfriend818@hotmail.com

Great story, your mix of love, drama, and sex in each chapter kept me on the edge of my seat. Easily one of the best stories ive read. Amazing job!

That was a wonderful series - stumbled onto the first one and then had to read the rest! nicely descriptive and very hot!

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It is a fun read. A non- traditional page turner. Should be required reading for writng stududents as fundamental representation of structure, plot, character intro and development, tension positioning, comic relief, dangling drama , hot fun, and closure amongst other techniques. Mahog18

I think there should be at least two more chapters. In the first one and after some sort of wedding Alisa should change her name to Alisa Simonsen and becoming Tawnya's wife. Then in a second chapter and after finding a suitable donnor first Alisa then Tawnya should get pregnant.

Thanks for this wonderful story.

At first I was hesitant about reading these stories seeing how many chapter it had but once I started reading the first one I was smitten! One of the best stories I've read. It has a great combination of romance, sex and drama. Well done, hope you'll continue providing us with plenty more great stories!

That was amazing from start to finish . Please continue this for me please , it too good not to

At first glance this story look like it will have some breadth. Between the number of chapters and their descriptions it looks like we have a smoking hot love story with a legal drama and perhaps a deep back story to explain how our hero and her Captain got the where they are.

Much of that is mentioned, but it all seems to be glossed over. There are some hot sex scenes, but the characters are not as well drawn as they should be and action outside of the bedroom gets handled in a fairly cavalier way. I'd give this 4 stars for a great idea, but it feels more like a treatment or an outline rather than a finished story. Love to see it fleshed out a bit.

Awesome

I enjoyed all these chapters and you are a fantastic writer velvetpie will you write more soon about these two please I have read these chapters and cannot wait for more thank you.xxxx

Wow I’m enjoying the ride maybe 1/ day you’ll come back to these two