All Comments on 'The Cleaner'

Reading your erotic story caused me to make a mess.

Not a fetish guy but you did some things very well and others quite poorly. Please allow me to enumerate:

Grammar and punctuation were rarely a distraction. There were some errors but they did not distract much.

Your main character is a slut. Being that is his only identifiable characteristic it makes it difficult for a reader to relate to easily.

The chick he banged is a slut....see above.

There is a sweet spot where D/s give and take works well for a lot of people. You missed it by a bit.

Having myself bedded a hotel maid, you are not far from a relatable tale. However, shopping my cock in the hallway never fuckin occured to me. Is this a new thing, a thing from the sub continent or just a dream thing.

Great effort and a mostly enjoyable read. 3*

not a very business wise decision, TK U MLJ LV NV

It was a story. That's about the best I can do.