by youbadboy
omagosh. This was the hottest story I have read in a long time. Fantastic.
good 2nd and 3rd pg - 1st was a little confusing- would like to see you continue with this story
Mmm, such a naughty little fantasy. It is so rare and exquisite to discover the girl who becomes submissive without violence. Sara's conflict wasn't with her dominant; it was with herself. And capturing that idea, you helped her find the 'something' inside her that makes her happy. Well done, badboy; you know I've been waiting for this one ;)
I prefer your stories of seduction between loving close relatives, who love and respect each other. Love, meaning you want the best for someone, even when passionate lust forces the issue. That razors edge of which you wrote so elequently in your bio.
P.S. You have been gone for too long.
Loved the story...hot, hot, hot..good stab at building on her obvious submissive nature...and her brother's growing possessiveness. Room to build on the story and reall hope you do...unclear as to why the kennel is there in the first place...connection to parents could be a good avenue to explore...worried that this was heading towards bestiality but glad that you didn't follow that direction. Thank you.
very well written, extremly erotic. i had no idea where exactly you were going with this and it made me read more and more. few stories captivate me like this and i loved it. such a revealing look into submission and incest. i thoroughly enjoyed it and hope to see more soon.
That was one of the best stories i have read in some time.... Hope other ones you write are as good.
I was pulled into this story like a well-behaved bitch on a leash. Absolutely great build-up and ending. Don't feel you must do a sequel...we already know what's going to happen again and again. Loved it!
I'm not into SM. Prefer your other stories of forbidden love. This is simply forbidden. And hot. Forbidden. And hot. Forbidden... Anyways, glad to see you're back. It was a thrill to come across your name again. And you didn't disappoint. Though the subject matter begs reconsideration, as I've said already.
I don't normally leave comments, but I just had to say this is better than a 5. It's very well written and draws you into the story appropriatly, spending adequete time on developement before moving into the sex -- and then finishes magnificently with the sex. It's also just the right level of dominance for my tastes, any more and I start to get seriously disturbed, but still just wrong enough in ways other than the pure incest to be most effective. Kudos!
incredibly hot and arousing, damn I never find stuff like that on ebay...
The title says it all. save one think. WERE IS THE NEXT PART? That story is to fucking hot to end there.
This was a really, really great story. Please keep writing these great stories.
As with all of your stories that I have read, this one was well written, paced, and hot, hot, HOT!<br><br>I felt left hanging at the end, though. Other commenters seem not to have felt this, but it seems to me that the missing denouement leaves three or more logical ways that the story could progress. That is problematical because these paths are entirely dissimilar. I did not get a sense of closure or of conclusion, which took a little of the peak away from the enjoyment of reading it.
that was such a wickedly hot read.i loved the leather cuffs and metal cage.her helpless submission,her reduced to being a bitch in heat,his pet.i could "see" it all.nice job.i'm throbbing...
I think I would kill someone if i could get another story of this quality. Really.
This story is HOT,some minor typos,nothing major.Your story fell into several kink categories,YBB,very nice job.Please tell us you are working on more stories.Right on,my man,write on.
WOW!! Great story! Lots of detail! Fantastic, really! Keep up the good work!
holy shit man that was the best read ever favorite author you are fucking amazing
I totally loved this story. Its fantastic - how thoughtfully you have written the erotic details.
Keep it up! I love you.
A few typos and a formatting error couldn't detract from a most amazing story. Thank you.
I'd love to see more of this, it feels like there's a part II waiting somewhere.
Yes, this needs a part 2. Sara's behavior with Jason during subsequent weeks (or years, or decades?), and whether they repeat the kennel ... or not. Only you, the author knows what will happen, even if you only find out as you've written it in the next, perhaps final, installment.
Your public awaits ...
just a great story, definitely needs a sequel...you are one hell of a writer. love it! :)
Could have been BDSM, brother and sister. Kinky and Hot.
one of the best storys ive read on here. very well writen great job . must admit wont to know what happens next
great story. good plot and continuity. novel idea. the kennel needs to be used again. thank you.
You have every reason to take it with this story.
A few edits needed for grammar and punctuation; stellar work.
I look forward to future works by you.
I enjoyed you story very much. Thank you and please keep writing.
Well written Loved for you to have continued it to another chapter or more.
It was amazing I couldn't help but masturbate and orgasm to it ;)
Your imagination is becoming unlimited, or so it seems. Great writing. Another five.
You ask for feedback but as usual you writers not just YOU don't listen to your readers comments. Eg, would have been a 5 stars but the stories NOT finished. Like so many other readers I too would have liked to see another chapter or two because this story is far from over. What's sad about this is clearly you have no intention of finishing it. ☹️☹️☹️.. for what it's worth ⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐ anyway...
Excellent story. Would love another chapter or two.
Also, any idea where you can find a cage like that, or a pic of one? Would love one for my pet.
Very enjoyable story. I think I'll have to ask my master for a cage like that. Totally submissive for him. A new dimension of control. He knows my body so very well and how to make it sing and how to make me beg
Lovely little story. You’ve just given me a new thing/idea to explore.
The build up was excellent and I started getting wet the second she got in the cage the first time. Thank you
This is one of the best stories i've read on Lit. But it seems a little unfinished i would to see a Chapter of it with a page or 2, i am propably one of the many to ask for a sequel but i do really hope that you will write a sequel, i usually read this story when there's not much good stories coming out, having said that. thankyou for publishing it here for us to read.
This was an interesting story, I would live to see where it goes from here
Master at work again. This was so different from everything I ever fantasized about, but so incredibly hotly written that I ended up totally immersed. I loved the way he was using her, but so gently and lovingly it did not even felt like non-consent. Domination does not necessarily have to be rough, right? ;)
Fantastic man, what a unique story. I feel this qualifies for a part 2 brother.
good, not great. too much time on BF. Should have "petted" her more in the kennel, brushed her hair, soft cloth to "pet" her back, tummy and back leg "Fur" like you would pet a Dog.
Oh my! Delicious…. He will do more I hope…. She wants more you know, she is happy as long as she is dommed….
Oh my, her face, her tits, her ass…. Hmmmm, she becomes an animal, …. Hmmm the dogs, should he???
Great story. Makes me wonder what other surprising toys may be hidden on the property.
Fucking hot and sensual .. I am very tempted to try being in a cage like that .. helpless, yearning to be stimulated until I beg to be fucked and my tongue hanging out in sexual bliss .. oh fuck me .. fuck me hard and deep .. oh yes 😁 😝