All Comments on 'Passion'

Not bad for a 1st story. If I may, you have a good premise for the story, but maybe stretch the story out some. Unless you wanted the story to be short and sweet. I'm looking forward to seeing where you go with this story, or maybe reading other stories that are in your mind. Thanks for your time and imagination.

Thanks for the input! I'm planning on going in a different direction with my next story, but I will expand more on this premise in the future!

I like it a lot. Well written and interesting throughout. I look forward to a continuation.