by wolf eye
You starte out a little Quick, mabye give it a little bit more build up, but other wise well written.
I'm interested to see where this develops between the two characters. Do they journey to the next town together, or head back to her people? How many races exist within this world? What sorts of threats does our ranger face, and do any of them involve her parents? I enjoyed this story, despite the present tense setting, which was initially a bit jarring, and the few times where tense slips into past rather than present. Overall, great use of descriptive text, and chemistry between the man and elf. Looking forward to more!
Thanks for the comments. This was a bit of an experiment for me. The fantasy setting and the present tense especially, so I'm glad for any and all comments/criticisms.
Chapter 2 is in the pending approval, and Chapter 3 is nearly written, so there's definitely more to come.