by melsdad
I would have had to go in and take seconds of her!! That was so erotic and hott!! Keep up the good work!
your story was about as exciteing as watching grass grow. you should of had the dad do her instead of mark. the story had no place in the incest/taboo heading.the story was so boreing i nooded off several times.
Good start. I like the peeping, but maybe you could have had more commentary about what was going on with dad while he was watching.
why don't you continue?It's time for the father,Mark,to fuck her now
I also wan to fuck your daughter but u have to near with her.
so your come can drop in her mouth
In some places, you should use less commas...and, I think you should make a new chapter, get her father to screw her next.
But yeah, it's just a suggestion. It was still good. (:
Daddy yearned to see her virgin cunt badly stretched and even split open if that is what it took to ger that swollen prick inside of her tiny cunt hole. He loved her truly but his yearning to watch her viciously raped and cum in was so much stronger. He was on fire and so was his turgid leaking prick.
Well, it was a O.K. story but it should have had more in the middle of the story. Like When he was trusting his member in, he should have waited a bit then kept on going back an forwth. So, not only would he Cum, but she should have Cummed as well. Even if it was his & or her first time. Come on, it need's to be more than just what You had put down on the Page.
By, Matthew Shanklin
I know your feelings. I have watched mine several times and each time I wish even more that it was me. I hope (soon) it will be.
VERY horny Dad