by Dai_Stiho
Yeah, he'll sneak back in to the magic armory sooner of later. She'll find him there hours later, gently stoking some item and crooning, "My preciousss..."
I'm very much enjoying and hope this continues for quite a while. You've created a pair of fine characters here that I very much want to get to know better. Well done!
Man you've got an amazing story brewing here.
On the sex - Personally would like to see some dom/sub action, maybe a little "yes master", is you know what I mean. Forced orgasms, eye rolling stuff all that shenanigans. With the dynamic you are building I could see it happing for sure.
On the story - You are already taking things slow and I hope you keep this pace. Don't rush anything and just take your time to build the story. Not emotional romance, no looming threat, no weird events, just keep it natural and fun for the first few chapters.
Throw in a few training montages of his future magic, martial art or just knowledge in general (come on he's in THE Library) and try to not be too predictable. Basically just keep this momentum going, and with that I'm sure you're going to create a Lit top 10 story, seriously.
That's all boss, I'll be waiting for future chapters
Mr.K
I like the patient approach to world building you have taken here.
A couple questions and musings:
Does the many worlds theory hold water in your universe? If so, what would that mean to a Librarian?
Do you suppose any mage has ever had one of the first people to be their tutor? If not, might it be that she is meant to teach Ashur to become her "chosen one"? Not as in "I am the Chosen One. (Mortal Kombaaaat)" but rather, you are the one I choose this you are the chosen one?
Great tale man!