by unlucky266
I like the scene where the two guys are chatting back and forth like schoolboys, "don't wake her up!" Even as a het I liked reading about the guys's relationship, it's very kinky. I could stand to read more about their quirky relationship even if it did involve a gay sex scene. And Aurora sounds like a very hot girl next door.
I liked this story, but I'd have liked it more with more interplay between the guys. In the context, it makes sense as written, though. Good job!
Sounds like the girl and the men have found a delicious situation, which could be exploited for more erotic stories in a series. Go wild!
As a bisexual man myself who has had an MMF threesome I loved this story, I would've liked more though, one page wasn't enough, please give us more!
Ian xxxxxxx
I'ld say that this is a good first draft but you should have an editor go over it and talk with somone about ways to better express yourself, Other then that it was fricken hot and i need to go get a towel now.
Very nice, i think that there should have been more descriptive action as far as the boys were concerned.
I liked it very much though, and keep writing.
Well written and well paced, it brought blood into my stiffening rod. Thanks!