by DonP
The writing is so non-erotical that this good idea of a hot story and the time of reading is wasted.
You still have much to learn, young jedi !
Where this story goes wrong is the whole cock to hole ratio. I mean 3 sluts on a boat and only one cock between them - it's too much like hard work. Either one girl and 3 cocks or if you want to send 3 sluts, its 3 cocks each for good gang fucking. These girls are up for it so they need to be fucked senseless - they need to be breathless - they need to lose control and go with it. And they need to worry that someone is filming it and will post it. I'm more than happy to contemplate Chelsea, Amber and Erica being fucked on a boat, but we need a lot more action. Don't have them watching - have them so covered in cocks and cum that they don't really know what is happening to their friends until its all over and they can compare notes.