by Visiting_Exec
This one is fun. Gonna be hard to keep the intrigue going but I'll bet you get it done. More, more, more!!!
A good, simple story with a touch of a twist. Nicely executed, and like others, I am very much anxious to see a sequel in the near future.
Great story, and well written. I was not expecting the plot twist at the end, but it totally worked.
... when Tom went to the men's room. A digression in the narration -- there's no suggestion that Tom actually loitered for several minutes while pondering his Rules to Pee By -- may take time for the audience to read, but it doesn't cause any time to elapse in the story itself. Thus, your timeline doesn't support the mother's place on the other side of the wall. A twist that only manages to be a twist by being contradictory to all that came before it has not been 'earned,' as they say.
<p>Well written, otherwise.
I would never do such a thing ,there might be a maniac on the other side with a cut throat razor.The story was real fun,how on earth are they going to continue,I assume she knew it was her son on the other side.I hope that you do go on,its got such potential.
What I liked about this story is how it slips up on you. Just when you get thinking it had to be Holly behind the wall, it turns out -- ooops -- heh heh --OMG, MOM!!!
Now -- the question is, did Mom know it was him? Or is Mom just into glory holes as her own personal kink? It seems to me you can have a helluva lot of fun with the story line if it turns out she had NO idea it was her precious son.
Yeah! We definitely need a sequel. :-)
Nice twist at the end. Please write more along this story line. Maybe dad can get sucked off by mom at the gloryhole. Or maybe the son can overhear mom talking about her gloryhole experiences.
This is a really a nice story with a great twist at the end. Can you also write the story but fom the mother's view. So we see how see entered the glory hole the first place and get fucked.
Great!!! But you have to tell more of the story, surely this isn't all that you have...
BillyF...
Great story, thanks for writing it and sharing. I only wish it were longer, a sequel maybe?
i just found the story to be very erotic in both writing and twists. an excellent fantasy
I've been expecting a continuation of this story. It's one of my favourites of all times.
I like the surprise at the end. It's probably going to be hard to continue it, but I will be waiting for part two! Thanks
was expecting the sis, but i thought he came to the conclusion that it HAD to have been her way too quickly (i realise this was to make sure readers thought that too, although the category should have done that job). i assume dear mother had no idea who was on the other end, which is what makes it awesome. sequel? nah, this story is great as a standalone, leaving him shocked and stunned and her none the wiser :D keep it up
I think he needs to tell her when they are alone on this trip....
Love the intentional suspense hold till the very end! Live it and the minds view is f the descriptive glory hole adventure. 5* plus
I vaguely remembered the jist of the story, searched for it for a while, glad I found it again! As hot as ever, thanks for sharing!
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I've more than once backed my hot pussy up to a Gloryhole to get a fuck. Walking out with warm cum running down my inner thighs really turned me on!
Orpheum69
Its y great setup for a interesting series ssssoooooo.....
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I never comment but I made an exception for this story. Really, really hot stuff.