All Comments on 'Coming Home'

Story Ok, but it needs editing. You have some minor typos that take away from the flow of the reading, easily fixed. Also, he wrapped her wrists with his belt, supposedly immobilizing them, but then in the next few lines, she grabs his face/head as he is eating her out. Unless she has an extra pair of hands, that's not going to work if they are still bound. The story seems like more development will come with other chapters, which will explain the story lead in....for example,what does the internet have to do with anything?

who exactly are these people?

why should we care?

how is this their "first meeting"?