All Comments on 'Did You Win'

That is a good one. 5 stars.

Morse code, braille and sign language are all still words. He just wanted her to not verbally say she messed up? Then just mouths the words? Also the part with John, the judge and the detective was just dropped? No consequences?

I agree with NegateDivity. Too many loose ends that were an integral part of the story just vanished. What story was told was good. The forced non verbal communication got boring as a lot of it was unnecessary. Her cheating with John for months before the big reveal seemed to be lost on Ross. It was never mentioned that this was a long affair and Ross just assumed it was the one time. Still 4 stars.

I'll give it 4, but as others said, it's all over the place with too many loose ends and no particular direction. And it takes a particular kind of stupid for a cop to tackle a father who had every right to be with his own son! There was no kidnaping, when he had left his wife at the party just two days earlier. So, it seemed the whole predators in the lifestyle were blown up as BTB-style caricatures, for no particular reason.

Sorry but this was nix. Too many time jumps and scenarios, no straight line.

I take this as a difficult journey of growth and discovery by a badly damaged woman who hurt a lot of people. It's not a fun or happy read, but it was interesting.

Tedious. 3*

There must've been an idea here, but it didn't see its way to execution unscathed. Nice to have something different from the usual repeated LW stories (even if the initial setup was a standard template), just wish it could have been more coherent.

Interesting communication twist but i cant say thT i caught where Ross reveals why he went down that path…. Not particularily useful to anyone involved that i can see

So, she cheated on her first husband, divorced her second because she randomly for no reason ran a DNA test comparing his with an illegally acquired sample from someone famous he thought he was relate too? Did I read that right or have a stroke?

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Then to top it off it turns out Jimmy is not only deaf but retarded as well?

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Also restraining orders dont work that way

“But you and him are divorced” obviously didn’t teach English language usage at that law school.

A good story but it was drawn out too much. Several stories that could have stood on their own.

I missed some stuff here,

How did Ross earn a living after he quit his job, where did the support money come from?

Was Ross in danger of arrest had he been caught seeing his son before that 18th birthday? If so, he must have had immense trust in both Kyle and Janet.

Was Jax becoming friends with Kyle a setup, or did Ross meet Janet afterwards?

To what extent was her upbringing a factor (if at all) in Dora's sex addiction?

Was it a sign of her growth that she was OK with being with another roofer (or was James a roofer at all)?

To you who wants to write a good story

It is necessary not to abuse originality

For if it exceeds a certain credibility

Then your effort is only seen for its stupidity

Too complicated

Well written story, just not my deal. I'm not a fan of pussy husbands, who run away and won't talk. A restraining order is easy to quash when both parties agree. Even a corrupt judge can't stop it.

there was no coherence.

I struggled to stay with it halfway…

"The devil is not always the wrong answer. Sticking up for yourself; asking your boss for a raise; and, telling your partner what you like in bed are all examples of listening to this devil."

Sticking up for yourself; asking your boss for a raise; and, telling your partner what you like in bed are NOT all examples of listening to this devil.

The story did not seem to know what it was about.

I rarely come back to comment twice. But this story is sooooo bad. The title really does not tie in to the tale. The story jumps around like a chicken with its head cut off, left laying on the ground for three weeks and then offered as payment for an overdue Amazon purchase.

If that statement made sense to you, then so did this idiotic story.

What the hell was the point of this? I've never seen such a confused piece of trash.

Didn't understand this one at all. I was lost throughout the story.

For a story that was so insistant on communication - it failed to communicate in any logical way.

Too long not lw but belongs in psychological site

They laughed at her for years because she was too stupid to recognize the patterned blinking. I guess she has never seen a hostage video in the DA's office. Jax thanks her for money and leaves her life immediately, telling her he loves her on the way out after shunning her for years. Wow, good thing he didn't hate her.

Hard to read stories about pea brains. Lessee, I need help recapturing my husband’s heart. Who can help me? I got it, the guy who I cheated on hubby with will have all the answers, especially after having hubby occupy the “cuck suite” while I fucked him. Right, makes all kind of sense to the pea brain, and this author.

This one is way out there. I am unsure why all these various issues are brought up in this story which started to be about forced cuckolding. I gave it a "1" due to writer or reader confusion.

Just did not like this woman.

Like four stories in one. Many tangents. A bit confusing though.

abyss is a woman's soul.....

Way too complicated.

All the messaging stuff was bizarre.

Just a terribly written, rambling story. More of a lose/lose for me. Lost the time reading and lost some neurons trying to follow along. Ross, Jax and all the friends were worthless. The detective, Judge and John never paid their due. Where did Ross get the money? Blah, blah, blah . . .

I think even a cuck story with lots of humiliation (a type story I detest) might be better than this meandering tail. Really can't find any redeeming qualities to this tale.