- Loving Wives
- That Fucking Project
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All Comments on 'That Fucking Project'
by Tlan
- 62 Comments
JoeBetterBNice2 months agoNo new ground covered here. Everything is pretty mysterious, seemingly by design, except nothing ever does really get answered and then the story ends w/ a copout line about a 750 limit. I like flash stories when well done. This was awful. I really felt like I was wasting my time by reading this. The grammar was okay and dialogue seemed alright, but still...no, this was really bad.
Tx77Tumbleweed2 months agoI gave you a 3 star rating more for what you almost did. Though it is an old story, you were moving it along nicely until the stop sign ending. The title and end connection make it seem like the only goal was to get 750 words down and not to have a story. I suggest an updated version where you scrap the ending and connect the title to the wife’s misguided self improvement plan.
northstanderrhino2 months agoHate these 750 word stories, its like going to a 5* restaurant expecting high level cuisine and ending up with a cheese sandwich.
deepender2 months agoMay that final sentence apply also to the end of this shallow genre: that's it, no more.
Anonymous2 months agoInteresting take on catching a cheater. It also give you the opportunity to come back with more sequences.
PrincessNutNut2 months agoVery, very, very clever, do I complain that there is no real story or laugh at the mockery of the 750 word project idea?
I'm not certain, so I'll pass on marking.
Would you please consider writing a proper story, though? There were some lovely touches in the opening of this piece.
Rosenkavalier2 months agoYou did really well.
But why for heaven‘s sake did you sacrifice your story to this 750 word idiocy?
My wish: Complete your story and post it with a slightly new name.
tanglosax2 months agoC'mon, commenters, give the author a break. This is his first try and God knows LW has the harshest audience in all of Literotica. The story made me laugh out loud, so I give him a 5. Tanglosax
EightyThousandEightyFive2 months agoClever? First story, so it’s hard to say for sure. Fingers crossed that the drab cliche of the set up was chosen on purpose to make the punchline land harder.
Lifestyle662 months agoThe problem with this 750-word story is that it IS an intro.
Some stories might be complete with just 750 words if they show a beginning, middle, and ending to that beginning within the word limit. There might be many readers who complain and want more. But the author had the ending for what they considered their beginning. Those types of stories are mostly just one scene.
This story went from the P.I. office, drive home, and into the conflict without getting to an ending. So, I'll give it a 4 for being incomplete.
onlythelonelylove2 months agoI guess some folks didn’t like the self-referential style. I did. I think that you might like to take the challenge of allowing this story to play out as a slice of life and see where it goes!
Thank you.
someoneother2 months agoI don't get the story.
Dislike stories that have "fucking" in the title, as it suggests lack of writing ability.
OldGuy19462 months agoAbsolutely loved it!!!!! 5 little gold pointy things and more if I could.
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OG46
Frank662 months agoWell, if that don't pin the tail on the donkey. Clever, and an apt illustration of how we readers feel about the 750 word project.
bobareeno2 months agoMade me laugh! A 750 word project with a sarcastic end that made fun of 750 word projects. 5 stars.
Grant_Glapsvidhrson2 months agoI thought this was fucking clever and a fucking nice first story. Ignore the puritanical arguments against having some variation of "fuck" in the title. If it is fucking good enough for Kurt Vonnegut (i.e., "The Big Space Fuck"), it's fucking good enough for Literotica.
Anonymous2 months ago"The problem with this 750-word story is that it IS an intro." - Lifestyle66
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No, the problem with this story is that it was deliberately written as an FU to the 750 Word Project.
Anonymous2 months agoNailed the butt hole that thought up the 750 word limit, but, please. More to this wonderful start.
Anonymousabout 2 months agoAmusing, most excellent, five star termination. Not one more word need be said; 751 ain't possible here.
EastCoaster1about 2 months agoYou have a good start on a story you should finish...
...the ending was unexpected, but not as funny as it was meant to be.
Anonymousabout 1 month agoYou're going to get your critics for that ending... personally, i loved it!
