All Comments on 'The 67 Year Old Lieutenant Ch. 01'

One page is hardly a chapter. Multiple chapters and it goes in Novels and Novellas. But before you do that, come up with a better premise and learn how to write.

Interesting start!

So far nothing; at this rate we might have a story by Christmas 2025

Intriguing

good start

I'm trying to get interested, but whilst the descriptions are good, and the story is incredibly imaginative, there is a disjointed, slightly chaotic feel to it. What am I seeing? The piece is too short to make a connection. Also, a series with short chapters doesn't stick well with readers. Offer chapters 2-3 times longer with definitive breakpoints, and end them with something to bring back the reader. Finally, unless all parts are currently written and ready to go, no one will stay around for a new reader who published "...something a while back." It's like starting a military campaign with a week's supply on hand.

Not much, but enough to get my interest.

Wow , what a suspenseful tale with a deep ravine of a cliffhanger at the end . I’m intrigued. Just hope you post the next chapter soon as the anticipation is killing me . Worthy of 5 stars and a standing ovation , hurry now !