by percheron
its an intense start, but your fellow authors are still giving you bad advice with the mentioned pos politicians, keep it to good military humor and great freaky sex with more future content...
This story from another excellent perspective. Thank you for sharing your thoughts and skill with the rest of us. Patiently(not) waiting for the next 5 star chapter.
Congratulations, Percheron, I'm so stoked to see this finally posted. It's a great start to what is gonna be a great addition to the Quaranteam-verse.
You've been waiting so patiently for the main story to reach the critical point, and it's so great to finally be able to give you the recognition you deserve, mate!
5 stars and a positive comment!
A great start. A few missing words here and there which broke the flow for me a little. Regarding (gasp) politics, I'm reminded of the adage about a group of politicians asked to design a mode of transport to be known as a "horse". Their first attempt resulted in a creature with one hump now called a "camel", to which a group protested, so they went back to the drawing board and then came along the two-hump animal, also often called a "camel". Then the military got involved and hence the "Zebra" with its Black and White stripes was born, as there could be no grey, red, yellow or any other offensive colour of camouflage. So yeah, every politician has their supporters and opponents. If it's needed for context (such as the lack of doing its job as described here,) then it's fine in my view. If it's a political diatribe with some sex as window dressing, it's a hard no and a one-star rating. Looking forward to the rest of the story.
Very good start, great even once it got past the choppy start and found its flow. I'm definitely looking forward to the next chapter.
Throughly enjoyed this! It was probably one of the better starts for the series. I am excited to read more from you in the future.
Your hero has heard (well, read, at least) about Oracle, so I'm sure that all partners will be totally compatible. No worries.
Great start and and love the other view point of a very tragic event in the QT universe. Allowing a ray of hope to be seen.
You left out some authors I am reading. 32 inch, lokisluckwriting, and disquiet certitude. I read all of you. Getting ready to read yours. Yes, I already read the episode that leads into your work.
Definite 5. And excellent editing. If I were looking for a fault it would be your use of decimate. Decimate means to kill 1 in 10. If you kill 3 or 4 out of 10 that is something much worse. But people misuse that word a lot.
Oh, and sometimes plans go BETTER than expected. Not very often, but it does happen. Things like no guards posted and they are all, 100%, taking a nap.
@tjb50cal
Not sure what military folks you’ve been hanging around, but his advice team has multiple veterans on it who agree that politics forms a significant percentage of military humor (alongside That One LT, barracks/tent/field conditions, AR670-1, alcohol and strippers, and seeing how much cussing can happen in one sentence). I can guarantee you that every National Guardsman who has to out on MOPP-4 for Duo Halo decon/delivery/corpse retrieval curses the name of Trump daily for the 2018 dismantling of the Pandemic Response team (despite the arguable amount of effect they could have had on this particular crisis)
I've read every story in the Quarenteam Universe by all the authors and this seems like it could be one of the best storylines yet.
I can't wait to see how the pairing up without Oracle works out, I hope well.
Anyway 5 stars for this chapter and I hope to read more soon.
PS, please try to limit the political bashing that some authors over do, but this old Veteran always enjoys military humor.
Thank you
@nurses while you are technically correct about decimation, it originates from Latin and is translated to every 10th, more modern entomology, however, from about the 1600s on as to "destroy a large but indefinite number of" or as Merriam-Webster defines it:
3 a: to reduce drastically, especially in number or
b: to cause great destruction or harm to
I first learned of the QT universe when accessing this new story. It looks like if could spawn a whole new genre.
Not quite sure where it will proceed from here, but I am enjoying the NZ location. I was at Sky Stadium two nights ago, so it’s very relevant, and scary. I look forward to forthcoming episodes.
New Zealanders are really bad at using decimate when I think they mean novemate (nine out of ten). Please excuse my Latin.
The bad usage is genuine Kiwi mate.
Yay! Another spin off! QT just gets better and better. Keep up the great work! Definitely five stars.
A great start one of my favorites in the qt universe.
The only one i lost the nerve on was the british bbc one.
Awesome another author to the Quaranteam party! A very great start! Thanks for bringing us the Kiwi perspective!
Possible scenario for the next chapter:
Caleb goes home with a dozen or so eager women, including his wife. He and his wife have sex, and they both fall into a regenerative coma. Which, of course, isn't even mentioned on the one page leaflet that is all those other women have available. All help desks are down; the Internet is probably overloaded. Could be an interesting time for his new harem; would definitely allow them the opportunity to get to know each other a bit.
Well up there with the other DuoHalo stories. I especially enjoy entries which move away from the USA,
I wonder if anyone's working on stories from non-Anglophone countries - other than the present Russian one. It would be best if they were written by a native or, at least, a long-term resident. (that's my opinion anyway - lol)