All Comments on 'Blast from the past'

by Spicyredwriter

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Nicole2023Nicole202321 days ago

Great first story, I don't normally take the time to read short stories, but I'm glad I have this a chance. I look forward to seeing where you take this

MigbirdMigbird21 days ago

Yes, please continue by all means. The closing scene — sex and uncertainty/tears — nicely done. Entire piece flows well with humor as we get to know main characters.

NoLongerAnonNoLongerAnon21 days ago

Yes, if you have more, please continue. That was a good short piece. I'd love to see you develop the characters.

metroalmametroalma20 days ago

Yes! A little fast and yet a lot of room for more story.

THBGatoTHBGato20 days ago

Congratulations on your first story. It was a good one - I really liked the supporting (literally and figuratively) cast on Bruce and Sherri. I kind of wanted it to be longer, for there to have been a more drawn out flirtation between Janice and Tina, with them tip-toeing around one another before the consummation.

I'm afraid all the errors of punctuation, capitalisation and text speak ("u" for "you") did detract somewhat and ruin the flow of the story. Perhaps reach out for an editor/proofreader before publishing your next story?

However, I don't want to end on a negative - this was great. Awesome set up, and a protagonist we can all root for.

AnonymousAnonymous20 days ago

Hot, even if a bit abrupt!

Anton79Anton7920 days ago

Very nice. I hope we see more from you.

AnonymousAnonymous20 days ago

More please

AnonymousAnonymous19 days ago

Hot. She should still have a go with Sheri. Bruce wouldn't mind watching. 5/5 stars.

Dewey Cheatham

AnonymousAnonymous17 days ago

I love the idea of this story, but gave it 4 stars because of the grammatical errors and pacing. Super hot but i'd recommend using a spellcheck or editor before publishing part 2, which i hope cums soon x

Sex_CrazedSex_Crazed15 days ago

Very good. Don't keep me waiting to long for the next part.

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