All Comments on 'A New Assignment Pt. 02'

OH I loved it! Please more!! :)

Oh and please a little bit longer? lol You start getting into it and then it comes to an end lol.

Your choice of tense for this story was a little distracting. It lacked continuity from the previous chapter and was hard to follow.

On a separate point, moving beyond very simple sentence structure might also also be a good idea. Others will disagree on this, but then perhaps we're dealing with two very different sets of readers here.

I am enjoying your story very much. I of course don't check on grammar and spelling too much, I look for the story line. Thanks.

very good nice flow but i feel like you're rushing it a bit

The col sounds like a marine, to the best of my knowledge in the military you don't wear your cover inside unless your armed, I might be wrong about the marines, my 20 years was army, good story so far, don't read very many military story's on this site