All Comments on 'My Evil Stepsister'

This is the first time I've ever commented on a story in 9 years, but I just wanted to say that I thought it was wonderful and enjoyed it very much. A few typos here and there, but otherwise amazing. Thank you.

I have to say I think that you have quite a talent to your writing, it's still a little raw but it's there. I think what I enjoyed the most is that there was a good backbone to your story.

Please keep writing.

As usual, it's great. A very good job and thank you for an entertaining time.

I think the name is a little deceiving. Any who, the story was great and it was enjoyable.

A really wonderful story. Thanks so much and please keep on writing. It was a real joy to read.

I enjoyed the story a great deal :) I hope you continue writing :)

If there was a 6 rating your story would get it

i love these kind of stories the most. the best story ever made.

Best story ever submitted on this sight hope you continue writing..

I have been reading stories on this site for years, as the other commenters have said this is an excellent story.

I would rank it right up there in the top 3 stories on this site.

Please keep up the good work and write more.

Thank You

A really GREAT story. Can't wait for you to right more.

Very rarely do I come across a store which is worth the time to fill out the comment box and this is one of them. The story started out in a way that captured my attention and held it through all five pages. The time just went out the window and was well spent on this artwork. This story goes to show that there are still great writers out there in the tubes. Keep up the great job!

Felt a little improbable times, but otherwise a great story and well written. I enjoyed reading it- thanks!

Like the way you wrapped everything up.

it's nice to read just Good Writing.

A truly wonderful story. I don't normally read this genre, but the title caught my attention. I loved the entire flow of the story. I loved how all the events unfolded. I loved how everything worked out.

A true pleasure, indeed!

nice heartfelt story...for a lifetime movie. but here we want boner-inducing wanton sluts and guys giving up a storybook fairytail life for a few hot moments...

As the author of this, my first posted story I am overwhelmed at the responses I have received. I really appreciate those who have taken the time to read it and comment. I have several other stories that I have completed and three of which are waiting approval. I am posting one story a day right now. The fourth one I am posting is a longer two part story where I have tried to develop the characters in depth and is titled Powerball. For those readers who are looking for more than a quick sex story I hope that they can enjoy this one. It does have sex at the end. Again thank you all for your comments.

By the title I thought it'll be something different, but it turned out to be a very good story. Brilliantly crafted story, and I'm sure going to read your future projects.

~Kelly~

about love and relationships and families... is the best way to go... some people always push their writing, as well as their reading habit, deeper and deeper into blackhole fetish of somekind... from serial cheating to killing to rape to loving to swip spit and other bodily fluids with total strangers, sometimes in groups.... saying it is the best form of sexual activities, with little or no regard to personal safety, family safety, including what happens to their kids if they should get sick or die from such narcissistic pursuits... <p>

as a very fastidious and clean person, I have no idea why people would want to allow multiple people, many times complete strangers, to deposit their bodily fluids in YOUR body, especially women... but people are (in REAL LIFE, reflected by these small, semi descriptive stories here) strange, ignorant, and stupid... from what I've read in "real news", on daily and weekly basis, these stories here in LIterotica don't begin to describe what real people do in the real world.... here, for instance, I have almost never read about something as simple as bad breath... or as real as what happens to the young kids whose parents engage in dangerous sexual/bodily fluid exchange and gotten sick from them... in the real world, tens of millions are inflicted with such hard realities... not in Lit... so Lit is actually nothing compared to how men and women really behave... <p>

anyway.... other READERS like simple, uplifting stories about trial and tribulations that only the love and support of the families involved --- perhaps with no more than the caring act of a step mother, like it is in this case --- can help to solve, without Rambo activities... <p>

as an author, you CAN and SHOULD choose your own writing style, genre, topics, subject matter and meanings.... you can write degrading stories about degrading acts --- and argue they are really "exciting" story telling --- or you can write positive, uplifting even if challenging stories, about families, friendship, personal growth and maturation... <p>

and I am NO bible thumping right conservative who yearn for the 1700s, saying it's actually better during those earlier years. I am an orthadox Liberal, with a capital "L"... but to me, uplifting things, stories, and people are always superior to masochistic narcissism, if not for any other reason, simply for the fact that degrading and masochistic narcissism activities -- AND PEOPLE --- are NOT VERY CLEAN .... since they are about exchaing bodily fluids with other equally or more masochistic, promiscuous, and self-degrading individuals....

I really liked it. I thought it would involve the step-sister, which would not really make it incest, and it was about her, but only as a side issue. The story was really about Jeff and Jenny. It was nice to see Liz turn from a bitch to a nice person. I liked how there was a finish to the story over time. I will add you to my Favorites and look for more from you.

What a wonderful romance story. I had tears in my eyes.

Thanks

This story is a nice read. Glad to see the good guys win once in a while. Well done WS.

These felt like real people struggling with the realities of mixed families.<P>

Speaking of realities - 9" ??? Really? However the rest was plausible and well rendered.<P>

Nice work Author - You are to be looked forward to.<P>

With Very High Regard

...a pleasant change from the usual....

I found it quite hard to believe, like as if a dad would hand his daughter that amount of money and tell her to get out, wouldn't he you know try and help her, talk to her, try to understand her problems. And Jeff's reason for leaving was so stupid, like ok she poured water on you, he might as well have run crying to his mummy. Also, calling someone a cunt because of an attitude problem? seriously? Maybe it is just me but the characters were not believable at all, and the events were SO melodramatic

Great story. The author did a great job holding the readers attention and moving the story alone.

This is a great story to read. The Author kept you interested from the beginning. Truly a feel good story.

This story has two elements that I find rewarding in any story: 1) A protagonist with integrity and character. 2) Characters without integrity and character find some way to improve - even if only a little.

The fact that the 18 year old protagonist had such integrity, character and wisdom might seem to stretch credulity. But no matter - this is a work of fiction after all. The same goes for the incredible growth Liz undergoes.

So, author, please continue writing and I'll be there reading.

This story sounds like the lame stereo typical fantasy of a wimp turned macho.

This story is in the right category. The hero never was a wimp, just not showy about his abilities. From the beginning of the story he looked for the right action and then took it. The women in his life discovered the virtue of being around a "good" man, no matter his age.

The writing flowed well and told the story without unnecessary details. I enjoyed the read.

It's one cliche after another. First it's the tough guy who break bones of the "bad guys" and struts like the peacock king so everyone runs scared when they see him from a mile away, then the rich girl-poor boy and disapproving father who later treats him as a son, then the bad girl turned angelic good girl... zzzzzz.... How many times has this one been done before?

I really enjoyed "Powerball" and this one ranks right up there. It's a fun read and look forward to more.

This is the second story of yours I have read and enjoyed both opf them a great deal

That was a superb read!

I enjoyed it immensly! You are a true tale spinner. You have talent and I am glad to be the beneficiary! I am looking forward to your next story!

Thanks for writing!

Sure it was a bit hammy and chiched but it was still a good read.

Loved it! Thanks.

I don't know why but i sure love it. It is different then most. I was thinking and hopping he would get together with his step sister. But it turned out better the way you wrote it. It's one of the best (no is the best) stories I have read! Again Thank You for righting and sharing this story with us/me.

I thought it was okay, but i would have like to see more sex scenes...

Another fantastic story. Thank you.

You can do magic with your pen. May the force be with you!!

most certainly have a way with your story writing,, a very good way.

spun, well done, excellent characters. Thanks

Excellent story line,well written.

You really outdid yourself on this story. It was a real sweet romance story. I hope you write more like it. Great job. 5***** toby9790.

Wow What a great Love Story, Just one question. Is this story true? Email me please nclarksecurity@gmail.com

this story was great, there was a plot, wich honestly i hadnt expected, but it was great

the guy having a nine inch penis? C'mon, that took away from the story and that's a shame because it was a good story.

are pretty unrealistic:

- teenage jocks not wanting to become king of the hill?

- grown man (and lawyer) bursting into tears at the drop of a hat?

- 18yo crying just because his g/f cries?

Also, Liz "converted" too easily. No rebellion or back-sliding.

Overall, though, a nice story.

Excellent writer. We need more by this author!

Little sex but good story.

Be realistic folks, this was a lovely fairytale for modern times, written to appease readers of pornography.

No unicorns were harmed in this production.

dude your title for the story here's a misnomer. it leads to believe that something's gonna happen between the siblings but turns out otherwise, and there's really not much of the evil step-sister thing going on either.

anyways great story, a little fast paced but that's alright.

cheers.

I am usually not one for commenting on stories, but in this case I have to make an exception. I really enjoyed reading this story. A very well put together story that really shows how the power of love and caring can overcome hatred, anger, and evil.

This is different from the usual dirty shit but I'm open to change. What is this story doing on literotica? It belongs in a book or something

The story on the whole was nice and romantic. Pleasant in tone being neither overwhelmingly emotional nor boringly analytical, but I have one minor quibble. Jeff is an eighteen year old man who broke the bones of two other people in a fight. I will tell you from experience that the police would be called, there would be a trial in which the consequences could be severe since Jeff is a legal adult in the eyes of the courts. Even if found innocent of assault, assault with intent to cause bodily harm and battery, the three charges most likely to be leveled at him, the courts would likely sentence him to anger management classes, probation and some manner of community service, since as a trained fighter he would have to prove he couldn't have ended the fight without causing grievous bodily harm. It's also likely that since the fight happened on school property, despite not initiating it, he would have had to undergo a forced suspension, since most schools in the US have a policy of "zero tolerance" with regards to fighting that causes physical injury on the level he inflicted on his opponents.

Besides that issue, the story was nice. Not great, but nice.

I lived and live something not too dissimilar in real life.

20 something years ago I had a meeting with my future step-father, I was 18. I had been the man of the house and my mother and sisters protector for 10 years. (I still am to a certain extent, and always will be. Protector that is.) He had two sons (21 and 18) (The 21 year old was newly married and out of the house.) and a daughter (16). Anyway the very same night I called him to have a private meeting, to give my blessings to marry my mother and discuss how I expected him to treat my mother and sister all hell broke loose at his house. It seems his 3 kids began an argument with my mother. They did not like the idea of their father marrying her, she was beneath him and accused of other things. The kids were and are wanna be rich and act(ed) like it. Their father has money but is not really wealthy. His kids were and are quiet simply snobs. Exactly the type of people in this story. Exactly the kind I despise.

Anyway my step-father got a call and we both went to his house and the entire future blended family had a pow-wow. Things were discussed. The marriage would happen. The 18 year old son moved out weeks later but before the wedding. The 16 year old daughter, Liz X10, ofcourse stayed. I was never going to move in, I stayed in my mothers house. However, my little sister did move in. And my step-sister tormented my little sister for years. I never dropped the hammer like I should have out of deference to my mother. But I let it be known I was not pleased. Skip forward. Are his kids still snobs? Yes. Are they as bad as they were? No. Does my step-father have his blinders off about his perfect kids? To a certain great extent. Does he acknowledge their bad behavior and blatant cruelty toward one another and others? Sometimes, and it hurts him to see it. But he allowed them to be what they became. "If you spare the rod, you spoil the child"...damn straight. I'll never not discipline my children. My step-father is a very good, kind and giving man. His kids...not so much. They're getting better though...at a glacial pace.

Im not a huge fan of leaving coments but this story deserves it. Great story keep it up

one of the BEST; story and story writer

This could have been called Saving My Evil Stepsister.

Nice story, several good life lessons included in the tale; which included a pleasant ending. Just a enjoyable "coming of age" story.

Thank you for another quality writing submission.

This is the best story i've ever read..good job dude..

I liked the beginning of the story, but I felt that it became too preachy. Jeff began the story as a sweet likeable character, but he only seemed to achieve this personality transformation in the quintessential 'cool' kids of the school, through aggressive intimidation. I felt that the character Jeff became what he hated and was written to be too much of an all knowing figure.

I don't remember ever having read a story that brought tears to my eyes. (several times)

Keep up the good work.

A. Young

nicely written love story

read lots of stories in the Romance category, but about the middle of page two it struck me that this has a strong After School Special vibe. By 1/3 of page 3, it was confirmed. Couldn't read any farther. I guess that's for some people, but not me.

I think the whole story was about children growing into adults, each in their own way.!Mom and Don and Jennys; parents were the steadying influences, All of a sudden , the kids have kids (grandchildren) and they are their parents and so life goes on! Great Great Story!

Now I may be 16, but I'm quite well built and good mannered, I do get pissed from here to there but this story found me by mistake to be honest... I started reading it and got really into it, I'm just amazed at it! And I'm some one who was called a psychopath by his therapist. It made me tear up... I ended up calling my girl over to read it and she aswell was amazed! Keep up the good work man, you will get far in life with this amazing talent!

lovely

stumbled onto this story

***** well deserved

I was looking for something to read and I stumbeld appon this one dude I think u should write books if u can write something this good u have got talent

great one by the WEB_SPINNER. he is one of the top 5 romance tale spinners

THANKS

I have read this story a number of times and no matter how many times I read it, it still brings a tear to my eye.

It is very well written and builds the relationships between the characters in a believable and realistic way.

Well done and keep writing.

...love this story. I have read and re-read it many times. One of my favorite stories. Keep up the great work.

5 Stars

A galaxy of stars

Another one of those rare stories, where I don't feel even a tiny bit guilty for voting a full five stars score.

I don't think there's much else to say really. If I could wish for one thing however, it would be a sequel (or companion piece) from Liz' point of view. That would explain her metamorphosis from bitch sister from hell to the sweet, gentle and in the beginning even timid girl she became.

***** another good one by the SPINNER

This has to be one of the most touching stories I've ever read. Please keep on writing wonderful tales such as this one for us all to enjoy.

MP

But I was really waiting for the sexy bitch stepsister to push Jeff to the point of taking her over his knee and giving her a proper seeing-to. White bread Jenny was a bore.

Well written, though. A clue is when the writer correctly uses "bawl" when someone is weeping instead of "balling." I hate when people do that.

stars from me.

Another brilliant story from you, a real tear jerker.

Thank You.

Very nice storyI I appreciate a couple of the comments connecting this plot line to real life. Interesting plot line and excellent character development. Well done.

Especially loved Jeff - there's perfect (good), there's too perfect (which is bad), then there's Jeff (which somehow becomes good again). Did seem a bit too much with the father/daughter confrontation - things like "you're no longer my daughter" and such - but it worked out fine all in all.

Also, just have to say that at first I thought the story was going towards Liz liking Jeff, but without knowing how to express it she did it the pre-schooler way: tease and bully him. Because of that hanging in the background, the romance build-up between Jenny and Jeff was probably not as good as it could have been IMHO. Not complaining though, as I'm sure if I read it again knowing the Liz/Jeff thing is a non-issue I'd like it even more than I already do.

liz and jeff are the two that should of ended up together. jenny just seemed to be the character in the way of that happening. kind of feel like I wasted my time reading this. shrugs.

This is for bloodandsand. When you start writing stories of your own you can end them how ever you want to. But until then, shut up you idiot. Web_Spinner is one the best writers on Lit. It is people like you that make me want to puke. Damn, what an asshole. lol

This is the 3rd time I've read this story and I still liked as much as I did the 1rst time I read it. I sure would like to read something new from you, Web_Spinner. Once again, great job, and a great tale.

I like the story, but it left me scratching my head. If it'd been a true story I would have sort of understood the way it was told. As fiction it left me wondering.

Not a lot of conflict and most of it resolved early on. The wicked step-sister is far from pivotal, could have been covered a lot less in the story, and seems to mostly be there to justify the title.

"Why don't you two come with us," I said looking at Marilyn and Brad.

Brad started stuttering and stammering. Tired of flirting and getting no where Marilyn looked right at him. "Bill, would you like to take me to the fair?" she asked.

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It was boooooring.

What a great story. This is my third time to read it, and it is still fun to read. What gets me aggravated are these critics that whine and complain but have never written or at least posted a word here. Keep writing all of you great writers and ignore the nay Sayers.

for 5 pages of one the best of the best tales on this site.

It looks like spermman didn't notice that this is in romance not incest. What she did to Jeff was the setup for Jeff and Jenny to meet and get together. It never was about her sex life.

Enjoyed the read thank you

9 inches come on! Man does hee haw? You know what this story is good very good. So there! Love you all! Bye.

You are not a writer, you are a storyteller or bard. I want to read all of yours.

Ed Grocott

edgrocott@gmail.com

I have never left a comment on a story, but this one, AWSOME

Awesome

I never bother to leave a comment on stories. But this one is awesome. You should write a book and with effort you will become famous and happy (wealthy). Follow your heart. Thanks for the good time.

Page 3 - Nobody under twenty-one has any business drinking beer. Also, "... the Wilson's knew Liz ...". It should say, ... McDonald's ....

Page 4 - In some places, Jeff''s friend is called Brad and in other places he is called Bill. Please be consistent,

What a story! It was your best so far. this is one of my favorites. Thank you for sharing your talent. JD from okc

It took Liz her whole life, with lots of negative influence, to become the bitch she became. It would take considerable time, and a very consistent positive influence for her to totally change her life around. Sticking her up in the garage apartment, alone, is not the environment and influence for miraculous rehabilitation. But its a great sentimental fantasy. Thank You.