All Comments on 'The Doctor Ch. 02'

CANNOT WAIT TO SEE WHAT HAPPENS NEXT!!

I understand u are writing in first person but could u cut out so much "I" it very distracting.

The first person isn't bothering me much. Though, because of the shortness, I might recommend condensing these chapters into a single posting when it is done. Maybe even do a rewrite to make it look like its his's diary entries or something.

Great story... feels rather Rushed.. an extremely short... you could expand an fill in a few areas...

Where is the rest??

My kingdom for a finished story!

THIS IS BLOODY DREADFUL.