by AverageBear
A very happy Valentine Treat. Good read although I think the sex should have been hotter after all it is a Valentine story. Thanks for sharing.
I'm not offended by your story. I just thought it was lousy. 1 star. Just one man's opinion.
What hole do these sick authors crawl out of? For one thing for sure, the hole leads from a cess pool.
Had me pissed from the word GO, then i got mad when you had him get horny by watching, i thought, here we go again another wimp who likes to see his wife with another man, then i was surprised when you showed it was him and his wife...lol...good read, well done and thanks ...Bob
I enjoyed the twist, that it was them in the video. I good story idea, but i thought the execution could have been better.
Of course, I'm not as indignant as the Anon who pretends to be offended when spending his time reading dirty stories.
Nice set up, and execution. Role playing. Good job. It may get bashed, but it was a fun read. The diclaimer at the beginning sort of gave it away.
More.
Looks like author took what he knew of LW readers worst bashing and wove thm into a clever rebuttal. Good loving wife, very good story. Knew this author usu writes about loving relationships, so was surprised to see title, but now I understand.
I gave it a 3, but next time just sent up a tri-pod in the closet
I enjoyed the story. Decently written, fun plot twist, good idea inspiration for couples. A camera on a tripod wouldn't have been as hot. Thanks for putting it out there. As to the no-talent, cowardly, needle dick Anonymous, fuck him.
about making your wife a whore to get your rocks off. It's one thing to want to see your wife with another man, but tough to imagine a guy would want to prostitute his loving wife. What would you do next when that thrill wore off? You'd probably have to create a new category for that one.
gee whiz, wish I had conceived the plot line. cuckholding the self shows great dimension of character. However since you lead us to believe your straight laced wife has exceeded expectations; you might want to explore one of two avenues.
A) through 16 years you had not traveled that path, and she saw fit to leave you blissfully ignorant of her controlling other side. or B) the excitement and high of the evening opens the door for fireworks on the fourth or new twists for the 17th valentine shared.
Apparently some cannot understand what they read. Still, I was not impressed with the story.
Don't some of the commenters read,he didn't whore his wife out,they role played eith each other! What,a hubby and wife are only supposed to have catholic sex,in the dark in the missionary position to make babies? Ironically it shows a couple in love expressing that love through play and the author gets it! For.yhe author I liked it,nice change from dull stories featuring bitch wives,wimp husbands and so forth....very hot,too
I almost skipped to the vote to give you a 1. I would have given more if he hadn't sucked his wad out of her. That's gay. But I was happy to see she wasn't a cheating whore.
Although predictable based on the warning, it was an enjoyable read. A good TLW, just what this volatile category needs more of.
Thank you!
M1
I'll videotape it for you for free. Have filmed several couples, a couple of threesomes and three gangbangs.
Would do it for free, for you, or for anyone else that might be interested.
let me know, @yahoo dot com
Brought a wide grin at the end. Loved the snooping buttinski secretary...added to the tension. Valentines Day, hot wife and Boston Cream Pie...clever clever clever combo.
Good story about a loving couple. Gave it a five. Had to reread it because I skimmed it to start with then find it was actually them made me glad and i enjoyed it from then on. There are alot in the loving wives that are actually cheating spouses and thoughs I don't like because that's not loving in the slitest bit.
But the ending blew me away.
A nice con-job, with a tricky ending.
Thanks for the read
And pretty well-written. A solid 4, thanks for writing.
Great twist :) I also liked learning about little tidbits along the way: like the "no kissing" thing and the difference between R & NC-17 sex.
You pushed all the right buttons in spoofing the genre. Great concept - and incredibly plausible. Made me want to re-read in light of the ending to better enjoy how I'd been duped. Enjoyable writing style and admirable job of putting yourself in the shoes of the reader to gauge reactions. Max
Well done. A little unfair given the description of the shock and horror on Rob's part when he is viewing the DVD for the first time. Whose idea was the DVD?
My only suggestion is to include more kink. especiallyi with the name you chose. Don't be shy.
But a solid B+.
Valentine's Day it's all about this: to a couple show all their love, trust and respect for each other...4*
A pleasant read and a very twist in the plot, well done.
It is refreshing to read that this was not another cuckold story.
Man, I was calling you every kind of wimp, cuckold, pervert in the World! It was a burn the bitch story in the beginning. Lucky you turned it around and saved your ears from burning. Good writing and last but not least, story. Cheers! c29
then it all spun around. I think the title may have put some potential readers off, but if they didn't read it, it is their loss.
Too bad I killed the wife and put the husband in the wimp garbage pail before I got to the ending. BAH!
You got me good. Beginning pissed me off, but you saved it. You can keep the creampie though.
Classic technique -- the reader "thinks" he knows what's going on, and then, WHAM! The big surprise ending that twists the plot 180 degrees. Thanks for an entertaining story.
Great story with a pleasant twist at the end, from thinking she was having an affair to realizing it was the two of them role playing and loving each other for Valentines Day. Well done! 5 ++ stars
Not bad..you got me there..but be careful it's starts by eating your own creampie and then one day she'll ask you..."is he taste different than yours hunny" ?
Good story, but be careful you are on a slippery slope, wifey might find she likes doing movies, especially big cock ones, are you sure you are up for that....
Composition issues are all covered quite well according to Writers' Workshop criteria, so kudos on the mechanics of it. Kudos also on the setup--the misdirection was effective, especially since P.I. use is so common in LW stories. The behavior of the MC (husband) played right into the tropes associated with a cuckolded husband, and that of the MC (wife) was so typical a description (in LW stories) of an inhibited wife finally embracing her inner slut and loving the passionate discovery of that so wonderful aspect of being a woman--that SHE carried acceptance of the plot development with such enthusiastic flair that the reader just HAD to accept it at face value.
To find out at the end that this was TRULY a LOVING WIFE'S story in the best sense of that phrase was a delightful surprise, and one which offered a nice counterpoint to the usual unfortunate recitation of "cheating wives' tales".
Damn well done. Loved it. More please.
MLJ
Great way to lead readers in the wrong presumptions. Then only to show them as a true loving couple. Kudos to you.