by BogartsBoss
Not a bad start, you could have embellished a lttle more.
Don't let the others get you down, you'll get better with time.
I thought the story was fine, the way it ended. I think there could have been a bit more character development to flesh it out though.
Now that's the sort of rehab the VA should be providing.
Loved the story
Brevity is not always a bad thing. There is an opportunity here to develop the relationship, but that would only be if the author feels there is a larger story to be told.