This story sucked big time! 1 star
The author has done some off-key, but memorable portraits of ostensibly respectable women who get let themselves sidetracked morally for a short period . Usually no one gets caught and this enflames the anger of porn site visiting moralists.
To be honest, this isn't the best of this writer and this writer isn't one of the best writers in terms of technique but his stories do ring authentic. I challenge anybody to read the stories of previous, deprecating commentator & reach the same conclusion.
In this story , Bronston22 was making a experiment . Many would say it failed. So what. He's done some good work in the past & odds are he has the savvy to do better in the future, should he continue to submit fiction. Who's the better writer Bronston22 or Hawkeye ?
That's debatable according to one's personal taste. But I would bet dollars versus donuts the former writer hàs been laid more in real life.
When are readers going to get the opportunity to give negative scoring on "stories?" such as this one which deserves a minus 5?
After 20 years of marriage she fucks another man and let's him shoot his jizz inside her skanky cunt. She makes her husband a cuckold and she has no regrets or guilt? I hope the player she fucked has crabs or herpes and she passes it on to her husband let the skank explain that one to her husband and family.
Apparently, I'm not the only one who thought this story sucked. How many times I've been laid is none of your damned business Lordslamfuck.
and back to the commercial....What goes on in************stays....TK U MLJ LV NV
Close to the same story you have written at least two other times. Repeated theme becomes fetish.
At least finish!!!!!!!!!
There are a couple of other unintelligible moronic trolls just like you.
Interesting following the psyche of this woman, her thoughts, as she becomes a slut for the first time. Thanks for writing - 4*
I agree with the score from the last commentator... Minus 4 stars..I only wish that was possible.
she intentionally lied to her husband, intentionally got drunk, intentionlly got bareback with his cum in her, and now lies to her husband by not admitting what she did and then had sexual relations with her husband knowing she cShe can ould be infected by STDs HIV and be pregnant with a bastard. The fact that she carried out those actions proves beyond a doubt several things. She does not love her husband and does not respect him or her marriage. She does not like herself and knowingly on several levels placed herself in harms way. And there is no want someone in the function didnt know what she did and now she will be the company whore. Her behavior medically has placed herself, her husband and her children in harms way by potentially exposing them to possible infections. What she should do is sit down with her husband and explain her actions, them woman up, and seek a divorce with no alimony and give up the children to her husband as she does not love or respect them enough to place them before her cunt. Saying was drunk removes no blame at all she since she placed herself in that position and did nothing to prevent it. Put bluntly she is just a piece of trash, you dont keep trash you throw it out. She can move to Nevada and make a good income.
for the sluttish, selfish behavior of the wife in this story. She is classified as mature but to be more precise that can only be said of age. It cannot be said of her ethics,
her grasp of her life experiences, her love of her husband (which she has not shown through her lies and her sluttish actions that she probably does not in fact love him and certainly she has not respect for him or her marriage. A woman in her position, will most likely NOT confess when she returns home which is one monstrous lie that the lie of omission.
As probably one of the only female readers on here, I can say that this woman is a complete and total disgrace to our gender >.> How can you cheat on a guy like that, in such a dirty way, and then not even tell him? I hope that guy divorces her...but the writing itself was only mildly subpar (which is more thab I can say about a lot of stories on here), so I'll give it a 3.
When it's a cheating story, just like thousands of other cheating stories, but the comments from the usual BTBers are especially vitrolic and condemning. I think it the 'she knew it was wrong mantra ' that tripped their harebrained truggers.The use of third person narration got em' going.
I've revised my opinion on this story & think it's a little gem. Kudos.
She can't control herself? That's an excuse made by people who don't want to face up to their mistakes and short comings. The husband deserves the truth and the right to make up his own mind if this was a one time failing or that his supposedly loving wife isn't what she claims to be. Oh - she might want to get to the Doctor for tests to see if she's bringing things home to her husband he might not want. Like STDs, Aids or maybe another child? What a weak, stupid woman.
I knew it would be a bad story. And it was. Poor effort made worse by the opening.
I think it was supposed to be an experiment. I wouldn't want to read many using this style, I think the characters are better at telling a story, but this worked for me.
The repeated "she knew it was wrong" was a very effective device that kept us on the edge about what was happening just as the character was on the edge.
Nice job, and you were able to crank the Anonymice up to full volume. Outstanding!
Fucking cunt. I hope the husband finds out.
Apart from the fact that the wife portrayed as moronic slut. Is that it is not finished!
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