like one of the Kafka's transformation stories. Great job!!! So much pain and pleasure.
Good concept and vivid descriptions, but the flip-flopping between past tense and present tense was nearly unbearable.
I do apologize for the tense changes. It was the second story I wrote and the first was 1st person so being new to writing and having written a 1st person story just previous kind of killed it. And it's really hard to go back and change it. After a while I will. Thanks for surviving through it!
I had trouble with the tenses too - fortunately the rest of the story was interesting enough to keep me reading!
And I like Victoria's character. Strong willed, intelligent and a strong set of morals that adds to the story. Too many writers subtract our moral compass from their characters thinking that it improves the storyline...and it doesn't.
Hmm, very interesting story. Quite frightening too. And the tense flops were mildly annoying, but the story was good. Victoria still had her morals, even as she was changing into a Gorgon. Too many stories just have the humans transforming have absolutely no moral standards, as if transforming just erases all of your built-up morals. Keep on writing. (:
Wondering if there will be a sequel? Probably not. 5/5 solid work.
Look for Unchained. Let me know what you think!
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