by glynndah
The opening paragraph could be tighter to set the scene. I would expound on the voice and the eerie quality rather than jump to the department store, plenty of time for that in paragraph 2 and into the shopping portion.
I liked the story idea and the overall interplay and wish you well in the contest. My vote didn't hurt you anyway.
I always wish they could stay together, but this was a nice little story. Good luck! :)
I liked it. I didn't think I would but it made me smile. Best of luck to you.
DG
Sweet - and the nightgown part had me grinning. Hope she goes back for the garter belt and matching stockings :-)
Great romantic story, with a nice little twist with the 'special' lingerie. The heart scene at the end was perfect. Leaves me wanting to know more about Kellyn and her ghostly lover. That's always good.
Thank you, and good luck in the contest!
Loved it nice tht the ghost came home wit her. Would have also been nice if he could have stayed and went to the shower with her. The heart in the mirror nice touch would like to read more about these two...
A very good use of long foreplay, the flow of a quiet woman, one that seemed to be doubting her mystical thoughts, yet reluctantly giving into them, with lust.
Purrfectly written, "Good Little Witch".
One of the more original ones I've seen, and the ending was great.
That was wonderful. I love how the ghost was like, no names necessary sweetheart, all that matters is the way I'm going to make you feel tonight. Very enjoyable.
There's a curious "sideways look" in your writing.
I love it.
HP