All Comments on 'It's Legal in California'

I liked the way you slowly developed Kate's character before even introducing Justin. And her friends appeared more realistically drawn than I've been used to reading in these kinds of stories. Excellent pacing.

Great beginning to a story. Please continue.

,excellent pace!! The story progression was well timed and moved smoothly.

BRAVO!

Loved the buildup of your characters. Felt like I've known them for ages. Look forward to your next chapter as it can go in any direction. -vriesea

all of that and "Kate woke to the insistent buzzing of her alarm."??? High marks for buildup, but then the plane crashes at the end of the runway instead of coasting to the obvious sequel set up...

Too abrupt an ending. Gotta fix that.

Please continue and make a part 2

This story must be continued. Thanks

I would actually love to see more of the lingerie shop. Give us some real scenes of their prostitution.

This is a wonderful story with good back story, and what I sense is a building romance, this could be a blockbuster if continued! 6 stars! PLEASE do more quickly. Ignore the Anonymous people! You have a talent!!

What a great start.... I agree 6 stars..... keep it going please!!!!!!!

I hope there will be more stories. Will Jen and Maria get a "ride" out of Justin?

I read the opening intro about you not wanting to make the characters have sex at the drop of a hat, and assumed that meant the characters wouldn't have sex at the drop of a hat. Imagine my surprise when they're flirting openly by the end of the first page and taking off each other's clothes before the second page is half done.

Still a plenty sexy story, but the reason I find good taboo stories to be exciting to read is because I'm not always sure where they're going to go. This one was obvious after the first 6 paragraphs.

Continue! Btw, I don't suppose this shop is based on a real life place?

Bad ending. unless you fully intend to continue a story, don't end it with questions.

the ending of a fiction story should resolve all issues, not open more. I still gave

you a 5* because otherwise it was a great story.

I hope the sex just stays between the cousins though.

You bet. This was so exciting to read. So what if they're cousins. Makes it all that much more...Fun. Hot sex with a big dick. I want more of these two. Hurry with another chapter. Made me Wet! ;)

Awesome story make another chapter

I agree this deserves a sequel. Could be the start of a very good story series.

However, it seems like a familiar story.

Where were you when I wintered in Chula Vista

Great story, although unfinished.

so much more fun to be had yet.

please more more more please

Make a part 2

wow....so hot, please another chapter

Well done! 5*

I just noticed that there is like a nine year gap between part one and part two of this story. That's a crying shame considering how good it is. 5/5 for this chapter. I'm looking forward to reading the next one. Please don't make us wait so long for the third. Kate is my kind of girl. I crushed on my cousin Fay who was 5 or 6 years younger than me when we both were teens. Unfortunately, my feelings were not reciprocated but we were good friends just the same. I'm going to live vicariously through your story.