All Comments on 'Undress Me'

This is more than competantly written and bordering on the poetic, but the middle - "warm breath probing" - is just not translating well for me. Breath does little to conjure up the sensation of probing as would a tongue.

I enjoyed the imagery and you have utilised some nice sounds

I think you could make "little black dress" a bit fresher, most things have been done before but that one is deep in the cliche woods.....

Also probing is harsh in sound and doesn't fit for myself as what breath would do, the rest is very sexy

of my ecstatic bare back .......

killer lines , Fiona : 5-ed !

Beautiful! Elegant! Sublime! both Undress Me and Gang Bang. 5 Stars!