I really liked this story but towards the end I felt like I was no longer in touch with the characters. The early chapters were easy to understand and empathize with what the characters were dealing with. Their journey to each other was beautiful. Then we jumped 9 months into the future. There was so much "missing" in the middle.
It's all about respect. R-E-S-P-E-C-T. He was mortified at the wife showing the photos as if they were baby pictures. Then she told his sister? She had every chance, every day leading up to the day of the final decree to say those two words.
forgive his mom why ? because she gave birth? look at what was written she fucked around on his dad and tried to whore him out with lies, so really mom was a skank, personally i thinks moms.. white moms get it to easy in the west look at the characters here two wives both written as selfish bitches, and yes his wife was one look at what he had to do to get her attention..yeah real loving skank their.. funny thing is in most storties written by both sexes on this sight all agree the first woman has no idea how to love.. i mean none find me a story where the women does 1 truly loving romantic thing for her husband.. i cooked food you like(like you werent fucking going to eat)..envolved another women in sex(like you didnt want to eat pussy hmm).. sorry just while reading this ive noticed it in all the stories male and female writers..men cant add it because it they have never seen it and women dont because well they are women of the 21st centuary and they dont know how to show it or write about pro-man romance it seems.
Perhaps it was a little awkwardly worded, but I could see him thinking of to the meteors and meteorites and considering what was going to happen in five years while he was writing. I think most of us would be distracted.
Wow, you're one of the best authors here. This a beautifully crafted story - excellent job, congratulations. You tell us everything we need to know, with everything in perfect balance. If you're not published yet by a traditional publisher, you should be.
But you still need an editor. But I understand. You're a Canadian and judging from your location in your Bio - probably speak French as your first language. That's why your writing seems a little stilted. But still, the story was amusing. They both weren't very smart and got what they deserved. At least no one needed to get divorced.
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Powerful
A broken heart is a real tragedy for one to bear. Some just give up. Raise your glass to those who survive and pray for those who don't.
Early chapters were better
I really liked this story but towards the end I felt like I was no longer in touch with the characters. The early chapters were easy to understand and empathize with what the characters were dealing with. Their journey to each other was beautiful. Then we jumped 9 months into the future. There was so much "missing" in the middle.
Well
If anything we get a view of our life in 2035. God help us.
Different
Would have liked to have read the book.
Love it
Very good , one of the best stories in a long time. Thanks
Excellent
It's all about respect. R-E-S-P-E-C-T. He was mortified at the wife showing the photos as if they were baby pictures. Then she told his sister? She had every chance, every day leading up to the day of the final decree to say those two words.
TOO LATE BITCH!
i call bullshit
forgive his mom why ? because she gave birth? look at what was written she fucked around on his dad and tried to whore him out with lies, so really mom was a skank, personally i thinks moms.. white moms get it to easy in the west look at the characters here two wives both written as selfish bitches, and yes his wife was one look at what he had to do to get her attention..yeah real loving skank their.. funny thing is in most storties written by both sexes on this sight all agree the first woman has no idea how to love.. i mean none find me a story where the women does 1 truly loving romantic thing for her husband.. i cooked food you like(like you werent fucking going to eat)..envolved another women in sex(like you didnt want to eat pussy hmm).. sorry just while reading this ive noticed it in all the stories male and female writers..men cant add it because it they have never seen it and women dont because well they are women of the 21st centuary and they dont know how to show it or write about pro-man romance it seems.
Very Nicely Done
Perhaps it was a little awkwardly worded, but I could see him thinking of to the meteors and meteorites and considering what was going to happen in five years while he was writing. I think most of us would be distracted.
I liked it a lot, thank you.
Mike
Wow, you're one of the best authors here. This a beautifully crafted story - excellent job, congratulations. You tell us everything we need to know, with everything in perfect balance. If you're not published yet by a traditional publisher, you should be.
Thanks****
For sharing.
Thanks***
For sharing.
Good Read****
Very entertaining thanks for sharing.
great
better/best than most
Not bad
But you still need an editor. But I understand. You're a Canadian and judging from your location in your Bio - probably speak French as your first language. That's why your writing seems a little stilted. But still, the story was amusing. They both weren't very smart and got what they deserved. At least no one needed to get divorced.
Could have been much better
With either a good proof reading or some decent editing.