by Senna Jawa
Is this an exceptional piece of work with a special insight into the human condition?
Or.Is this apiece of trite, self important pretentiousness?
I don't know but suggest reading again, Bullwhip Rose(Wicked Eve) or The Color of Absence(The Mutt) or perhaps 1201's first American Vignette before reaching a conclusion.
Therm. reflects the title not an assessment.
lonely
&
cold
I did not vote on this, because I do not know your work, so I do not know your standard.
I do not know what anonymous is trying to say.
I may be thick, but in my opinion, this suffers from excessive minimalism.
And if minimal is the direction you want, it suffers from too many words, probably can be reduced to two, maybe one.
And I am only making this comment, because I saw my number come up.
I rarely sit at a crowded campfire
I'd rather shiver in the cold
for solitude and silence
warms my soul!
or senryu, it works well as either I think. This one evolved well, your tenacity has paid off.
k.
I know nothing about haiku but I love the visual image created by such a sparse rendering. Like looking at a photograph. Lovely!
This poem was mentioned in the Archival Review thread, in a picking through Lit's archive of over 36,000 poems.
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a passage I heard someone quote and I paraphrase---
"I would rather sit on a pumpkin and have it to myself, than be crowded upon a jeweled cushion..." something like that. Thoreau perhaps?
I also enjoy quiet times of reflection, without the intrusion of others' inane jabber. But other times, I find being alone very lonely. We are human...
well done SJ