All Comments on '50 years'

The story tells a sweet story, and I really liked some of the images, but I have a few bits of (hopefully) constructive criticism: 1. I think your piece would be helped considerably by some punctuation. 2. The rhyme feels really forced. Try coming back to it with a fresh perspective a little while from now to rework it. That seems to work for me. 3. Typos are very disconcerting (gorwnup).

For what my opinion's worth...

Agree — typos & punctuation need work. These weaknesses pull down what could be a rather nice piece.

As you have written something very touching that some can relate to. Keep up the great writing and sharing :)