All Comments on 'A Certain Man'

The understatement played on my nerves, a good edgey poem but not likeable because of its subject.

One thing I would criticize is the text of the note, I think it is too long. I think you should have ended it '....I am going home to wait.' You have already said '...for the future make a decision.'

b'brig

captures me and imprisons with the twist at the end. i agree with brig as to those two lines. you may have overlooked that. with it only saying, 'i am going home to wait'leaves it clear and so much stronger. that is my humble opinion. i really love this piece. heck, i can only rely on fiction to come up with something like this......don

you had me hooked untill

the end. I thought the subject

was great and a bold decision,

the note at the end worked

fine for me, I loved this!

Thanks.

~ J

I'm not sure you need a note at all. Or, to use a quote from one of my favorite movies, "Sorry, wrong number!"

in its theme and content and kept Me in suspense until the chilling conclusion. And then it left Me hating her. Evoking such drastic emotions from Me only proves how effectively written this piece is, ishtat. Another unique topic birthed from your pen. <smile>

Vixxx

very well done

Last two lines...last

A real kick-ass piece!

Now that he's seen

The joy of her betrayal,

Does her decision matter any more?

Sounds like she is saying put up or shut up. This lady means business ~ for now - no lover tonight.

and split or possession before the sack. TK U MLJ LV NV

Wow! Powerful! Thank you for sharing.