- Non-Erotic Poetry
- A Certain Man
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Click hereI am now fully informed and
have taken control of the situation.
I wait for you in the foyer,
of the Grand Hotel,
You will come,
I know you will.
I met your lover- introduced myself.
He had already booked a room,
but he gave me the key
and no argument. He understood
and left quietly. It was oddly civilised
in the circumstances.
I am certain that
I have everything under control.
There's a taxi.
Is it you? Yes it is.
You half turn to the doorman, smile thanks,
adjust your hair, so lovely.
Confident, practiced saunter
to the receptionist.
"Yes Madam, room 812".
Eyes devour your procession to the lift,
you smile again, excitedly, in anticipation
and complete happiness.
In 812 you will find a brief note
which says, "no lover tonight and
for the future make a decision.
I am going home to wait for that decision".
But, now uncertain,
For I have seen the joy of your betrayal.
- COMMENTS
tazz317almost 12 years agoand split or possession before the sack. TK U MLJ LV NV
duddle146over 17 years agoSounds like she is saying put up or shut up. This lady means business ~ for now - no lover tonight.
LeBrozover 17 years agoA real kick-ass piece!
Now that he's seen
The joy of her betrayal,
Does her decision matter any more?
Wanton Vixxxenalmost 19 years agoin its theme and content and kept Me in suspense until the chilling conclusion. And then it left Me hating her. Evoking such drastic emotions from Me only proves how effectively written this piece is, ishtat. Another unique topic birthed from your pen. <smile>
Vixxx
sackalmost 19 years agoI'm not sure you need a note at all. Or, to use a quote from one of my favorite movies, "Sorry, wrong number!"
Jennifer Calmost 19 years agoyou had me hooked untill
the end. I thought the subject
was great and a bold decision,
the note at the end worked
fine for me, I loved this!
Thanks.
~ J
dcpoet44almost 19 years agocaptures me and imprisons with the twist at the end. i agree with brig as to those two lines. you may have overlooked that. with it only saying, 'i am going home to wait'leaves it clear and so much stronger. that is my humble opinion. i really love this piece. heck, i can only rely on fiction to come up with something like this......don
Anonymousalmost 19 years agoThe understatement played on my nerves, a good edgey poem but not likeable because of its subject.
One thing I would criticize is the text of the note, I think it is too long. I think you should have ended it '....I am going home to wait.' You have already said '...for the future make a decision.'
b'brig
