All Comments on 'A Fantasy Never To Be'

With some careful editing, this could be a good poem. Besides a couple grammatical errors, there are some inconsistencies and many unnecessary words. Repeating "slowly" as the first word in the last two stanzas detracts from the poem. Just some friendly advice from a novice..

-Sheila

dont control only watch and accept praise. TK U MLJ LV NV

Seems achievable to me!

We have pale blue sky here in Nashville!

My arms are vacant at this time...

Does this afternoon work for you?

Tomorrow...and tomorrow...are also possible...and desirable!

(Pssst! Less is NOT more. More is Better!)