All Comments on 'A Long Song, I Will Not Write'

Very nice rhyming, pelegrino. On the first stanza, I almost want to remove the "but" on line four, since all other lines begun with "I". To keep the timing (if that is a concern), you could insert an "all" before alone (I am on this beach all alone). S3L4 could use some padding, imho, to read longer and match the other lines in the stanza. E.g. "You are so near, and yet so far".

My favorite stanze are 2,7 and 8, they carry a lot of what is being said in the poem. Had a laugh with the bit about german tourists, too — it's always strange, overhearing foreign tourists' chatter, especially if they think they cannot be understood. They have completely different concerns...