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tazz317tazz317over 11 years ago
LOTS OF MEMORIES AND VIBES

are given off to those receptives, TK U MLJ LV NV

demure101demure101over 11 years ago
If only

the world worked that way... Very nice!

HarryHillHarryHillover 11 years agoAuthor
This was written

exactly as it happened. ... Now your next clue ...yes Virgina, there is a Santa Claus ...Who am I?

..

Thanks so verry much for the comment!!

AlpharoticaAlpharoticaover 11 years ago

Posted this already but cant see it so...

Great engineering 7-5-7 as it should be and with the word Lust that I think acts as an effective Kireji balancing strangness implied in the first line with familarity in the final line. I feel if you included a Kigo, then spring would be ideal, but this is of course optional in the modern form and being about love and lust I would argue it links to the heritage of natural things underpinning the japaneese origins and somehow adding an addition aspect of completeness (the point of this site notwithstanding)

All in all a pleasure to read.

Was it a challange to formulate?

AlpharoticaAlpharoticaover 11 years ago
Oops

I meant 5-7-5 of course .,. cant seem to edit comments after posted.. will have to rmember that,

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